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DreamerGrl27
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0 posted 2000-10-29 10:08 PM


I never understood him
But I never really tried,
I told him that I loved him
Then I ran away & cried.

He never gave me answers
When i always hoped he would,
He gave me looks and smiles
But I never understood.

He broke my heart in pieces
But he never picked them up,
He acted like a child
But I thought he was grown-up.

I'll never love the same again
Because he broke my heart,
I'll have to find another way
To fix the broken parts.


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1 posted 2000-10-29 10:14 PM


Hey!!! WeLcOmE tO pAsSiOnS!! I'm so happy that im the first to reply! I know your absolutely going to love it here. Great entrance in to passions and i cant wait to seem more!!

I never understood him
But I never really tried,
I told him that I loved him
Then I ran away & cried.

I really liked that part

Kit McCallum
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2 posted 2000-10-30 06:30 AM


Welcome to Passions DreamerGrl!

We are very happy you have decided to join our community of poetry friendship. We look forward to having you share your efforts with us and please keep in mind that we are very supportive of each other. The pleasure you receive from reading comments on your work is the same pleasure others need by receiving your comments on theirs. This is a rule that all poets here follow. We invite you to join the family!

This is a wonderful first post, and a very rhythmic poem, nicely done! I hope to read more of your poetry and your responses to our wonderful family of poets! (check your e-mail for a special message)

Best wishes,
/Kit


[This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 10-30-2000).]

DreamerGrl27
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since 2000-10-29
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3 posted 2000-10-30 07:27 PM


Some one please say something about this!!!
I got no replies...I'm dying!!!

Erin
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4 posted 2000-10-30 07:33 PM


Welcome to passions!!!I hope that you enjoy it here!!!Good first post...Some guys are so hard to understand...They seem complicated too...I know I was with a really complicated guy...It seemed as if he was 2 people in one...

But anyways I hope to see more work by you!!!


~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~

keoni
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since 2000-10-16
Posts 850
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5 posted 2000-10-30 07:34 PM


Hey, this is a good first poem. Even though this is from a guy's perspective. Don't give up on love. I have been burned many times and I have not given up and I have found someone new every time. Don't lose hope. Do me a favor and check my new post out . Good Job and Welcome.
                                   Keoni

sweetypie5
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since 2000-10-06
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6 posted 2000-10-30 07:50 PM


Hey welcome to passions and it was a great poem!!! I hope that you like posting your work here because so far it is really good. I hope to see more of your work!!!

When boys are four they will give you thier gum, but when they are forteen they won't even give you the time of day...


Lakewalker
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7 posted 2000-10-30 08:55 PM


Welcome to Passions
This is a very good first post!!  I hope you like it here as much as I do.  I'm not good with advice but I think the poem is very good, thanks for sharing it and I hope to see more poems and replies from you soon


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8 posted 2000-10-30 09:06 PM


WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!

You'll see that we are all one big family in here.  Someone to talk to or someone to just plain vent to.

This is a really good first post Dreamergrl27.  Such emotions in them.  Keep your hea up girl.  keep it up and keep sharing

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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9 posted 2000-10-30 09:10 PM


Welcome to passions..........this was great. I loved it the format was wonderful and i hope to see you around more often!



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

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Rodeo Jones
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10 posted 2000-10-30 10:02 PM


I usually hate love poems, but this I really liked.  Beatifully simple flow...I can't wait to read something that's not a love poem by you - oooh...shivers just thinking about it.  Party On.

"Where is fancy bread, in the heart, or in the head?"

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