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Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

0 posted 2000-10-29 12:17 PM

yelling,screaming
at me I'm used to it
tears just run free,
never stopping
never believing me when
i tell u im not lying
I never did anything
so believe me, I'm
hurting inside and
u won't look
I wait for that phone
call,email, that instant
message that will take me
away from reality
but we both know the pain
will come back worse
than before
~Ina~

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

1 posted 2000-10-29 12:25 PM

Hey Ina...i'm sorry your hurting inside..but your poem was great. I too always look for those things to take me away from reality but i hardly every get them. I hope you do tho...Feel better and great poem.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2000-10-29 01:30 PM

Well good poem, I like the little thing where you put "instant message", i dont know why. It appealed to me.
Good poem

"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

Lakewalker
Member Elite

since 2000-08-05

Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people

3 posted 2000-10-29 01:59 PM

"but we both know the pain
will come back worse
than before"

The pain shown at the end of this one is sad. It seems like one of those times where you want everything to work out so well but you know it won't. Great job of writing these feelings down, it's a really good poem.

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

Child of the Stars

Senior Member

since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

4 posted 2000-10-29 03:31 PM

Hey. This was really great..I liked the way the thought carries to the next sentence.. well try and see the rainbow...and keep writing..

~Carly

The grindstone of life will either polish us or wear us down, depending on what we're made of.

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