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Slim Junior Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 49Kentucky, USA |
It's not one of my favs, but oh well... hope sumbody likes it! Nothing Can Know No words can know what I feel for you No heart can know what I want with you No mind can know what I think of you No voice can know what I want to say to you No arms can know what it's like to hug you No hand can know what it's like to grasp you No star can know what I wish for you No sky can know what i would do for you Nothing can know what it's truly like to be with the one and only........ you |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey! Glad to see another post from you!! I really liked this format, it was great. The repetition made it so cool....well keep writing!! ~Carly The grindstone of life will either polish us or wear us down, depending on what we're made of. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I just got done reading your other poem and came straight to this one. I think the repition is great too, it built up a strong sense in me that whatever you were leading to in the end was very important, and it was. I really like this one  ! Nicely done and thanks for sharing  No star can know what I wish for you No sky can know what i would do for you < !signature--> "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! [This message has been edited by Lakewalker (edited 10-27-2000).] |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
AWWWWWWWW dang ur sweet! You must really be in love otherwise you wouldn't be writing poems like this. This was a really sweet poem! Curlz "I feel fine enough I guess considering everything's a mess" Barenaked Ladies |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Hey...i really liked this poem. I thought it was pretty unique but i love unique, it makes things interesting. Good job =o) |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
The repetition in this poem works well. The format is written kick buttedly *new word*. Glad to have read it.  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Wowie, this sounds just about perfect for my boyfriend Justin, whom if you're around here long enough, you'll learn more and more about. C-ya, Allysa Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see. |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Hey this is so sweet! Geeeez! I liked it  Good luck with this person, you seem to be in love  Bel |
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