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Jeremiah Johnson
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0 posted 2000-10-26 07:23 PM


I'm still stained from
Days before. unable to
Find a cure. roaming the
World from shore to shore
Wandering why, what for?


I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-


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Child of the Stars
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1 posted 2000-10-26 07:49 PM



  Hey. I'm in the same boat...haven't found any answers yet..good luck in your quest...

  ~Carly

The grindstone of life will either polish us or wear us down, depending on what we're made of.


Isabel Galaxia
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2 posted 2000-10-26 07:49 PM


Are you lost too?  This is really a great poem.  The shortness gives it an effect...not sure exactly what effect but one all the same.  Good luck to ya, hasta luego  
Bel

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3 posted 2000-10-27 04:02 PM


Very good poem. I loved it. I was surprised that it ended so suddenly cuz i was expecting it to be bigger but that sudden end just made this huge impact. Good!



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
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On the streets w/ people
4 posted 2000-10-27 06:02 PM


Ah yes, everyone is searching for something, so everyone should be able to relate to this.  Well done, I like this poem

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

curlygurly
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5 posted 2000-10-27 07:37 PM


wow i'm not the only one that feels lost right now! surprise surprise. great poem, it was really cool  
Curlz


"I feel fine enough I guess
considering everything's a mess"
Barenaked Ladies



Morouxshi San
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since 2000-10-11
Posts 207
San Juan, Puerto Rico
6 posted 2000-10-27 09:33 PM


many people can relate to this, it is so well expresed.
very good poem. i really think its very good.


San, the wise
San, the dumb
San, the guy...

Erin
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~Chicago~
7 posted 2000-11-01 10:37 PM


Jeremiah~
Its so good to see you back and with a wonderful piece of work!!!Looking for answers is the hardest things to do cuz it takes so long just to find them...So dont go looking, they will come to you...


~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~

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8 posted 2001-03-13 12:41 PM


WOW, you have some great power. Must you please share this wisdom with the rest of us?

Ronil (The sweet sound of summer sends serenity through my soul searching for that evermore solitude.)



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