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Dopey Dope
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0 posted 2000-10-26 04:45 PM


NOTE: There is a naughty word in this poem. 2nd stanza, last line. Starts with a [edited by moderator] ends with [edited by moderator]. hehe I don't know if they will filter it, but if they do......remember.....Starts with [edited by moderator]..ends with [edited by moderator].....*smirks*

Trick Line:


Where's my crock pot?
Lost within insidious dreams.
A philantropist of the blah's.
My colorful hell of happiness.

Flying over clouds nightly.
Eyes clawed out by hate.
Women wage war on all mankind.
The feinds, the [edited by moderator].

Diseased vermin play with my food.
Consumed by hypocritical index fingers.
We're the chosen ones to live,
Yet closer than we think to die.

  
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"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!


[This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 10-26-2000).]

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Ina
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1 posted 2000-10-26 06:01 PM


r u getting angry and women?.....lol
good poem though very good

curlygurly
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2 posted 2000-10-26 06:23 PM


wow i sense anger hehe. good poem just don't be so violent!  
Curlz


"i've kissed the moon a million times, danced with the angels in the sky"
enrique iglesias


Isabel Galaxia
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3 posted 2000-10-26 07:58 PM


Wow....Dopey....wow.  Um...I don't know what to say.  It's good...but I get the feeling your just a little*cough cough* angry at certain people...?  When did you write this(I know I ask all the time)?  Hasta luego
Bel

Kit McCallum
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4 posted 2000-10-26 09:28 PM


As you know profanity is not allowed in the guidelines. Even disguised with symbols.
Erin
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5 posted 2000-10-27 01:51 PM


Whats going on Dopey??? Were you in a bad mood when you wrote this???

~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~

Allysa
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6 posted 2000-10-27 03:44 PM


Dopey, I like this much!!! Ya know I love you man!!! And I respect your artistic side, and all, but what's this about??? Sometimes the world needs to just walk around screaming "I don't give a ****!!!" and be like my man Eminem, and all!!! Well, just remember, I love yoou!!!
Allysa
(too many happy pills)

Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see.

Dopey Dope
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7 posted 2000-10-27 04:54 PM


Hehehe well they edited my word......oh well!
I posted it up totally understanding the profanity deal.......but i so love profanity when I am mad.....which in this poem......yea i was mad.
Well i was mad due to the fact that i got dumped. Women........i wasn't pissed off at all women but i put it in a general way so i wouldn't have to specify on WHO did WHAT to me. I don't know......anyway.....it's not really only about women but i dont feel like interpreting it unless im asked like i was on "Tub Of Meaning".......anyway....im glad you all enjoyed this..uh....hateful poem.
i hope to post up more! hahaha



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

Lakewalker
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8 posted 2000-10-27 06:22 PM


I felt hate in thios, but it is an emotion that does have to be expressed, and you did that well.  In a sweet innocent kid's voce: "Don't you know cussing is wrong?"  Anyway, good job on this.

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

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