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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada 
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Face Down: Face down on the ground hiding from the world, a voice whispers little words, Spines freeze, eyes close we fall into a misty red sky sailing where dreams get stoned, lives are misplaced Stunning people equal harsh death When hell freezes, heaven boils young angels lie face down eyes tearing with bitter shame, Leaves stir meesing with mother nature horizons collapse, the world falls apart Into a bowl which I eat as my cereal sugar,spice and milk ~Ina~ |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
my x-girlfriend liked your poem a lot. So did I. It has this twisted feel to it all. Great poem Ina!!  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Yeah, this is twisted, and cool. I like it  I liked the imagery in this, nice job on it!"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
It's weird..but it's really good. Actually I think it went over my head, but that's not unusual. Maybe it's just lack of sleep..who knows. Anyway, nice job, keep it up Bel P.S. There WAS meaning behind this...right....? |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey. This was really..thought provoking. I had to re-read it a bunch of times. I've decided that it is incredible. hehe...great job. I especially liked the end.... ~Carly The grindstone of life will either polish us or wear us down, depending on what we're made of. |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
WOW! ummmm yeah this was really good but i'm not sensing the meaning. it was still a great poem, it would be a LOT better if i understood it hehe Curlz "I feel fine enough I guess considering everything's a mess" Barenaked Ladies |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
do i seriously have to know the meaning on my own poems?just playing.....all the poems I have been writing and posting are about my life and how it feels like to be alone,loved or i dont know thanks guys your responses mean alot to me ~Ina~ |
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