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Secsyy lil angel
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0 posted 2000-10-25 01:49 AM


It was all so great
Until it had to end
You left me with a broken heart
One not so easy to mend

You didn't give a reasson
Just told me it was best
To give up all the love we had
And put our feelings to rest

At night I often wondered
If it was me who did something wrong
As the pain seeped silently out of my heart
The pain that I felt for so long

Although the reasson is still not known
Why you left me that day
I know that we will be friends forever
And in my heart you will always stay


~*Love exists only in the hearts of those who choose to acknowledge its existence...*~

*~To the world you may be one person, but to one person you may be the world.~*

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Lonelypoet
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1 posted 2000-10-25 08:16 AM


Secsyy lil angel,
great poem! and i like your signature.lol.
anyway, that poem sounds all too familar about me....nice job.

There's a difference between knowing a path and walking that path....

Child of the Stars
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2 posted 2000-10-25 08:39 AM



  Hey. This was really really great..It flowed really really well. really. well stay strong....byebye nows...

  ~Carly

The grindstone of life will either polish us or wear us down, depending on what we're made of.


Dopey Dope
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3 posted 2000-10-25 02:11 PM


This was a very heart felt poem. great job and keep them coming.



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

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Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
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4 posted 2000-10-25 03:53 PM


It's crazy that they won't tell you why they broke it off!  But this is a good poem you've written about your feelings

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

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5 posted 2000-10-25 04:21 PM


Other then the last stanza, the reminded me of a break up my best friend went thru last year. altho the reason was known...he broke up with her for another girl, and now that girl wants MY Justin...I dont think so!!! Im not gonna stop fighting for him!!!!

~*~Tamma ~loves~ Justin~*~


If you love someone dont put their name in a heart,
put their name in a circle, because a heart can be broken
but a circle is continious.



keoni
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since 2000-10-16
Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC
6 posted 2000-10-25 05:33 PM


I really enjoyed this poem. It is my relationship with a friend in a nutshell. She left without a reason why, and I am not ready to let go,she is confused and I will not give up. But at least you have kept your friendship, that is important
                                   Keoni

Erin
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7 posted 2000-10-26 01:53 AM


Good poem!!!

In the end it (I think) works out better as friends if people break up...And its good to hear that he will always be in your heart...


~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~

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8 posted 2000-10-31 09:48 AM


this is a very beautifully written poem.  You did a great job.  I do believe though that you should talk to him and ask him for the reason.  He at least owes you that.

Keep writing and keep sharing

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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