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Jenn Cirrincione
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0 posted 2000-10-24 07:53 PM


You burn me, you sting....
Can I survive anymore?
Can't seem to handle this thing.
All of what we had, presently a chore.

I gave it up, then want it back.
I'm so worn out, will this ever stop?
This always happens, guess I got the knack.
I try so hard to comprehend, till I nearly drop.

I always proclaim, there will be no more.
This time was the last,
This settles the score.
Began so quickly, can't end just as fast?

Love me and leave me,
Kicked out the door.
Fight me, deceive me...
Can't try anymore.




"Guess I'm not smart, I let you un-nerve me, I let you control me; afraid the truth would hurt me, when it's you that hurts me more." TLC

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1 posted 2000-10-24 07:59 PM


Well this was very negative, keep that head up Jenn. Never give up on anything you love, thats my motto.



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

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2 posted 2000-10-24 08:34 PM



  Hey. THis was really good.. Dopey's right... stay strong, kay?? And smile. It helps.

  ~Carly

The grindstone of life will either polish us or wear us down, depending on what we're made of.


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3 posted 2000-10-24 10:04 PM


Giving up is the easy thing to do, and believe me, i wish i didnt get fed-up so much and do the same thing. If you really love this guy and you believe that he's worth all your time and effort, then go for it. You never know what you had until its gone....Great poem!
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4 posted 2000-10-25 03:41 PM


It's much easier to give up, that's why not quiting means so much more.  To me this poem gave me the feeling that you are very frustrated.  I liked this poem, it's well done.

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

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5 posted 2000-10-26 01:49 AM


Good format Jenn!!!I love the rhyming...Giving up is the easy way out and that only teaches you to give up when it gets tough...Fight through it and know that you are willing to try to be it...

~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~

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6 posted 2000-10-26 09:04 PM


Hey, this was good, but so negative  .  I'm sorry you have to go through with something like this.  Anyway, keep your head up, stay strong, and SMILE!  Hasta luego
Bel

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