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Dopey Dope
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0 posted 2000-10-23 06:44 PM


Black Widow:


The black widow spins again
Among her webs of love.
I grin, then smile. She's my friend.
The souls bright shining glove.

Her octa-leap pure of heart
Has caused my mind a drift.
The web of time comes apart,
And axis of placement shift.

The black widow becomes as one
With the past perfect sense of life.
Sorrow and pitty in eternal shun.
She continues her way of strife.

Future unknown, past all lost.
Living for now, and today.
Completely avoiding insidious frost,
And kissing the nights away.




"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

© Copyright 2000 Pepe de la Muerte - All Rights Reserved
Child of the Stars
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1 posted 2000-10-23 07:31 PM



  Okay this one made a LITTLE more sense, but I'm still in awe at it... too intense for my growing mind...hehe...stay cool man.

  ~Carly

The people walking in darkness
have seen a great light;
on those living in the land of the shadow of death
a light has dawned.
~Isaiah 9:1-2

Morouxshi San
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2 posted 2000-10-23 09:45 PM


very good poem, i know i said i wouldnt reply till dope gave me back my cd, but this one was good...

San, the wise
San, the dumb
San, the guy...

Pixie-Babe03
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3 posted 2000-10-23 10:00 PM


this is great Javier! you once again have created a masterpeice   hahaha hope you feel better!
~*Justine*~

CLBinLOVE
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Hilton Head, SC, USA
4 posted 2000-10-23 10:26 PM


*still woundering what exactically black widow is* but hey...i like mysteries hehe
just cant figure em out for the life of me, but i love the deepness of the expressions, very....thought provoking? yea i guess that works

let tie fighting words lie
let the candle light die
let the sun come up
let the same inply
~EvE 6

Lakewalker
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5 posted 2000-10-24 04:02 PM


I like your expression.  It seems I always say that in my replies to you though, but I truely mean it.  Your poetry always make me think, which sometimes I like and sometimes I don't (if i get it I like it, if not, well, what do you expect )  Anyway, nicely done with this poem.

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

peanogrl83
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6 posted 2000-10-24 05:21 PM


Dopey, you've done it again my dear! This poem is pure gold - combining splendid control of the language with a thought-provoking theme. How on earth do you prolifically spit out all this wonderful work?  I'm jealous.... lol. Magnifico, mi amigo!

Vreni

Suga_Baby
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7 posted 2000-10-24 05:25 PM


This is Bea-uuuu-tiful! *L* I LOVE it! Your work is always so deep! You have an amazing talent  
Dopey Dope
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8 posted 2000-10-24 06:40 PM


OK well basically......thanks for all the replies.......means a lot to me.
You're all cooliez in my book.



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

Allysa
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9 posted 2000-10-25 08:29 AM


Dopey: oh wow. im in awe. it took me a second to comprehend this, for i have an extremely large headach at the moment. All I can say is, I love you man!!!!
Allysa

Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see.

jytree
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10 posted 2000-10-25 10:40 AM


All I can say is whoa far out man!!!.

early to rise,
early to bed,
make a man healthy,
But socially dead-Dot animantics.

Poems are F.U.B.U
( for us by us.)----ME


Isabel Galaxia
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11 posted 2000-10-26 08:41 PM


It's really good, I like the title...don't know why.  Do I say the same thing ALL THE TIME?  Feels like it, alright, hasta luego
Bel

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