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Jenn Cirrincione
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0 posted 2000-10-23 05:52 PM


I thought you were cool,
possibly cute in a way.
You were so sweet, you made my day.
I knew you were a gem, I didn't always know why...

If I lost you, I knew I would cry,
If you wanted more though, I knew I would die.
A friend to me, never more than that.
I looked up and saw, maybe you wanted an "us".

You scared me away, you made me say no...
Then you went from sweet to cold...
Where'd my friend go?!?!
I miss what we had... I need you still.

Please understand... I know not what I want.
But I do need you here...here with me now.
I made a mistake, maybe I should've tried.
I want you to kiss me; this time I won't hide.




"Guess I'm not smart, I let you un-nerve me, I let you control me; afraid the truth would hurt me, when it's you that hurts me more." TLC

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1 posted 2000-10-23 06:40 PM


This kinda confused me.......at first you're saying you only wanted to be friends but then at the end you're like.....maybe i should try...."kiss me!"......so i don't know. You do display the confusion that you were talking about. You don't know what you want......so im gonna say this: Don't lead him on. If you don't want to do it..it's better to just leave it be than start a fire and put it out before it starts to roar.



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2 posted 2000-10-23 07:19 PM



  Hey. This was great, you showed your confusion well like Dopey said...well good luck with this...happy writing and stay cool..

   ~Carly

The people walking in darkness
have seen a great light;
on those living in the land of the shadow of death
a light has dawned.
~Isaiah 9:1-2

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3 posted 2000-10-24 03:19 PM


I like Dopey's advice of not leading him on if it's not really what you want.   But if it is what you want, than go for it.  Good poem

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

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4 posted 2000-10-24 03:55 PM


I can definately understand this poem. I'm on the other side of it though, wanting more than there is out of a friendship. He made it apparent to you that he wanted me where as i havent done such things cause im too scared of exactly what happened to you guys. I hope you get that friend back, i'm shur he meant a lot to you and its sad that friendships are ruined by stuff like this. Its totally not worth it. Did you ever hear the quote "When did we go from being best friends, to nothing at all? If i would have known i would have kept you as my best friend instead of losing everything". I think it speaks for itself...Great poem!!
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5 posted 2000-10-24 05:38 PM


Well, sometimes I believe he made it apparent, and at other times.... I just don't know. I think he's as wishy washy as I am about the whole thing. Who knows... Hopefully we can figure this stuff out.
Jenn


"Guess I'm not smart, I let you un-nerve me, I let you control me; afraid the truth would hurt me, when it's you that hurts me more." TLC

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6 posted 2000-10-25 07:55 PM


Dopey --- She's trying to say that he was a great friend and that's all she wanted him to be then he made a move which scarred her away.  Now she's realized that she made a mistake.  Maybe she wants him that way too..right Jenn?  

Much enjoyed read.  thanks for sharing

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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7 posted 2000-10-25 08:50 PM


Very correct, acire. Right on the bullseye. Well, I don't know anymore... but that WAS the case. Thanks for the reply!
Jenn

"Guess I'm not smart, I let you un-nerve me, I let you control me; afraid the truth would hurt me, when it's you that hurts me more." TLC

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