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jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01
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State of Despair

0 posted 2000-10-22 09:34 PM



I’d rather be me
Than ever be you
Only because of
The things you do

Let me be myself
Allow me to stay
I'm not changing
I'll remain this way

Try what you must
You can’t change me
For I am stronger
And you will see

I'm left stranded
Under the bright sun
You’ve died off
Now your all done

Stronger will stands
Evil is now dead
I'm now in peace
Just as I had said

Someone will come
Like the one before
Down they will fall
Like there is no more

Jeremy Raulinaitis 10/22/00


"...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I have a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~


© Copyright 2000 Jeremy Daniel Raulinaitis - All Rights Reserved
Isabel Galaxia
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since 2000-06-18
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1 posted 2000-10-22 09:59 PM


Wow, this is great, really.  I don't know what else to tell you....keep it up k?  Hasta luego
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2 posted 2000-10-22 10:28 PM


I absolutely loved this one!! I've read a lot of your poems and this is one of my fav. Being yourself is sooooo important. I think you sent out an important message in this one. Good job!!
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3 posted 2000-10-22 11:07 PM


Good job, a short syllabled style that i use at times. Message was good.



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
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4 posted 2000-10-23 03:35 PM


"Let me be myself
Allow me to stay
I'm not changing
I'll remain this way"

I like the determination in these words, like you are fighting a battle and have to be strong against people changing you.  Good poem!



"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

DancinQueen
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5 posted 2000-10-23 04:20 PM


hey babe!   told ya id get to this one. WELL..this rocked! ure words always hold so much confidence in them. i love your poems, keep up the great work!  

<3** Kiley


"One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be"
~Carol King

jeremydraul
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since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118
State of Despair
6 posted 2000-10-23 09:20 PM


thanks a lot, it means a lot, im glad to hear im a confident person  

jeremy r


"...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I have a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~


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