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0 posted 2000-10-22 07:38 PM



I've reached that point in my life,
That im no longer an existance,
I'm just a name.
I have so much to loose,
But not a damn thing to gain.
I'm tired of trying,
Tired of waiting for that so called "better day",
I'm suppose to be happy,
But for me things never seem to be that way.
My best isnt good enough,
Your best doesnt compare,
I use to care so much if you said,
Tomorrow you wouldnt be there.
Well ya know what?
Be my guest and leave,
You making me happy?
Ha!
What a dream...
There's only so much you can do,
To help me through this time.
But ya wanna know what?
The choice is no longer mine.
This has gotten out of control,
My hands are bare.
My heart was stolen,
My feelings arent there.
What would u like me to do?
Wait and see?
If tomorrow will bring a better day,
A chance to be happy?
I'm tired of waiting,
For that one special day.
I'm turning my head,
And looking the other way.
You'd be foolish to stop me,
You see my pain.
You know
Almost everything i have is lost,
And i dont have a damn thing to gain.
Let it take me over,
I'm to weak to fight.
You'll see it's deadly outcome,
When you get that dreaded call,
In an upcoming night.

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1 posted 2000-10-22 07:44 PM



  Hey. This was really, really good...I'm worried though, depression seems to have it's evil wrath on you at the moment...don't give up the fight if this is true...

  ~Carly

The people walking in darkness
have seen a great light;
on those living in the land of the shadow of death
a light has dawned.
~Isaiah 9:1-2

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2 posted 2000-10-22 09:01 PM


I hope you're ok and everything works well. Nice poem and keep posting



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

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"Almost everything i have is lost,
And i dont have a damn thing to gain.
Let it take me over,
I'm to weak to fight.
You'll see it's deadly outcome,
When you get that dreaded call,
In an upcoming night."

I need to know what you mean by this.  This caught my attention.  

Please don't do anything stupid.  Email me if you need someone to talk to or open up to.  That's why we're in here in passions as a family. We're here to help each other. keep ya head up

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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4 posted 2000-10-22 10:47 PM


Yeah, I don't really like the feelings behind this (if i understood it right) but it's still a very good poem.  It had a sense of drama when I read it, I like that.  This is great writing.

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

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5 posted 2000-10-22 10:58 PM


Hey everyone...thanks for responding and showing your concern for me. It means a lot. I've just been extremely depressed for a while now and i wrote this a few hours ago during one of my hit rock bottom moments.
Acire- please dont worry, i over exaggerated what i meant by that part that caught your eye. I'm not gonna do anything stupid but i am hurting a lot.
Thanx all for reading it and responding.

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6 posted 2000-10-23 06:23 AM


What a powerfully emotional poem SugarHigh. I was glad to read that the extremes reached in your words are not a path you are contemplating. I find writing such a release for some of the sorrows of life ... putting it on paper is such good therapy for the soul. Take care, and know that we appreciate you here at Passions, and if you ever need to talk, many of us are only an e-mail away, myself included. Take care,

Best wishes and hugs to you,
/Kit

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