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The race is on..
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The race is on.. |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA 
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5.Sept.00 Such misery echoes through the chambers of my heart The walls begin to crumble and fall apart From the earth shattering cries that travel through the lonely hours of night They know that my heart isn't as hallow as I let on So the race is on, to flood my soul with such anguish The Demons of the night find my plight of tears quite delicious They feed off on the pure innocence radiating from my cries They love to fill my heart with secrets and lies Of things that have long died I'm weakened and no longer filled with pride As they begin to chain my heart Each link representing one of their lies God, I beg of you send him He that is pure of heart and an angel in disguise To help me break these never ending chains of lies And someone to look deep within my eyes And to help me rebuild these walls within my heart [This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (edited 10-22-2000).] |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey. The wording in this one was so powerful.. "They feed off on the pure innocence radiating from my cries" Holy smokes..well, so long.. ~Carly The people walking in darkness have seen a great light; on those living in the land of the shadow of death a light has dawned. ~Isaiah 9:1-2 |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well it licks that you have to go through this but i do hope you do find someone to help build up the walls of your heart. Good luck!  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
many of us share this feeling, keep searching, overall it was a great poem and i enjoyed reading something i can relate to, keep it up jeremy r "...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I have a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
"Such misery echoes through the chambers of my heart The walls begin to crumble and fall apart" I like this beginning! The whole poem seems really good  "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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