navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #3 » Missing Bliss
Teen Poetry #3
Post A Reply Post New Topic Missing Bliss Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Dopey Dope
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Moderator
Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

0 posted 2000-10-22 02:26 PM


bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla bla

Missing Bliss:


A time gap frozen.
I live to die no more.
New heavens to gaze upon.
It was all a folklore.

Wandering fake plateau's.
The consequences of bliss.
It's all that I've lost today.
It's all that I miss.






"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

© Copyright 2000 Pepe de la Muerte - All Rights Reserved
Child of the Stars
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Senior Member
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI
1 posted 2000-10-22 02:32 PM



  Javi, you continue to amaze me. Tootelz, and hope that rain clears up soon...

  ~Carly

The people walking in darkness
have seen a great light;
on those living in the land of the shadow of death
a light has dawned.
~Isaiah 9:1-2

Morouxshi San
Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207
San Juan, Puerto Rico
2 posted 2000-10-22 02:34 PM


can it be?
dope has a new dawn?
a sun that can revive the dead blossoms?

can it be?
that the earth stood still?
dope found his way in this crazy maze?



San, the wise
San, the dumb
San, the guy...

Lakewalker
Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
3 posted 2000-10-22 04:54 PM


Hey, wonderful job writing this poem Dopey.  I have noticed this style a lot lately, I like it.  Short enough to get the point out but not too short that it loses anything.  

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

Dopey Dope
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Moderator
Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico
4 posted 2000-10-22 11:13 PM


Good job dopey! Your thoughts were expressed wonderfully! I fully enjoyed this one!
Keep posting.....we love you here!



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

sweetstuff101
Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375
OK, USA
5 posted 2000-10-22 11:32 PM


Great poem, I really liked that. I don't know what it was about that, but something just draws me to it. Nice work, keep writing!

Luv,
Sweetstuff
< !signature-->

~*~ YeStErDaY iS tHe PaSt, 2mOrRoW iS ThE fUtUrE, ToDaY iS a GiFt, ThAt'S wHy We CaLl iT ThE pReSeNt. ~*~




[This message has been edited by sweetstuff101 (edited 10-22-2000).]

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #3 » Missing Bliss

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary