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CLBinLOVE
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0 posted 2000-10-19 09:06 PM


to dream is to live
dreaming is a gift
and dreaming is living it gives your soul a lift

you can fly above the sky
you can breath beneath the sea
in your dreams you could even know me

i am your soul
i speak through our dreams
and most of the time you listen well it seems

i speak of my ambitions
and i recount the day
i might make you look at someone a different way

i tell you waht i feel
because feeling is what i do
i guess my sense of feeling is called esp too

i live within you
i watch you every day
and i speak to god for you at the end of your day

so be nice
-your soul A.K.A. your consience, your dreams, and the person people see if they look into your eyes

ok well it sounds kind of corney and i think it is a little odd but i guess its a start right?
tell me what you think please!

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1 posted 2000-10-19 09:11 PM



  Hey there. I really liked this one. Odd is good, so good...hehe...well, happy writing!!

   ~Carly


I'm nobody, who are you?
Are you nobody too?
Then theres a pair of us-dont tell!
They'd banish us, you know...

Lakewalker
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2 posted 2000-10-19 09:22 PM


I think this is a very good look at what our dreams really are, they can expose our true self to ourself.  But anyway, nice job.

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

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3 posted 2000-10-19 09:22 PM


Well this was nice. I like the concept of this poem and the message is great. Keep it up!




"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

Isabel Galaxia
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4 posted 2000-10-19 09:47 PM


ChicoChicoChico- Nice one   Welcome back, it's about time   Keep it up, smile for me

Bel

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5 posted 2000-10-19 10:43 PM


I really really like this poem. Nothing else to say, just, it made me feel good.

"Sa souvraya niende missian ye." \
I am lost in my own mind.

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6 posted 2000-10-24 05:58 PM


This is actually very good.  This is written in a very different way and I love it.  keep it up

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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