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0 posted 2000-10-19 02:30 PM


A peach is a peach,
And a plum is a plum.
A kiss aint a kiss,
Without some tongue.
So open your mouth and close your eyes,
Hun, this much you've verbalized.
If you kiss me one more time,
I'm shur to go insane.
It's just my heart,
Dont worry about it,
It's just a game!
What if i kissed you,
And led you to believe.
That my kiss wasnt just a kiss,
And it was more than it seems?
How would u take it?
Would you fall for me to?
How would u like it,
If i did this to you?
I'm not even shur your doing this,
But thats the way it seems to be,
I wanna know straight forward,
Do you love me?
You see I fell for you darling,
I fell for you hard.
I wanna get up,
But your kisses are in charge.
I need to set myself,
On the path i need to take.
To kiss or not to kiss,
An answer to this question i have to make.

© Copyright 2000 Michele - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2000-10-19 05:10 PM


Hey, this was cool.  It really got what you were thinking out.  Have you asked him about this? You probably shouldn't form an answer just on what you assume.  Great poem

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2 posted 2000-10-19 05:18 PM


Nice poem, but I have to agree with Lakewalker . Do go on your assumptions alone. I have been burned too many times in life assuming something was more than it was. Just ask. It is as simple as that, there is nothing more too it. It isn't embarrasing or stupid Just ask.
                                 Keoni

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3 posted 2000-10-19 07:09 PM


The poem was interesting relating love with a french kiss and such. INteresting concept......well yea good job tho!



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4 posted 2000-10-19 08:28 PM


I totally agree with your first 4 lines   I'm not gonna further that line though.  I don't think people in here wanna hear what i think a real kiss is. That is so funny   I'm sorry but it caught me by suprise!!!  This poem is defenitely captivating....keep it up

"A peach is a peach,
And a plum is a plum.
A kiss ain't a kiss,
Without some tongue."  


I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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5 posted 2000-10-19 08:59 PM


Well, I guess I have a few things to say about this poem.... I understand completely what you're referring to in the fact that sometimes they just kiss you, and think nothing of it, but you feel it's almost a contract to have more. I've been there. If this is what he's doing than he ain't worth it... now as to the lines in this poem, have I heard them before? Well, of course not the WHOLE poem, but like the... a kiss ain't a kiss without a lil' tongue? part.... Is that inspired from something else?
Also, I think a real kiss, the most important kind really is just soft lip kisses, not grandma kisses, but if I can avoid the St. Bernard thing, I'm ecstatic! It helps if a little tongue happens somewhere down the line... I suppose. HEHEHE Good poem, though!
Jenn


"Guess I'm not smart, I let you un-nerve me, I let you control me; afraid the truth would hurt me, when it's you that hurts me more." TLC

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6 posted 2000-10-20 10:26 AM


Shugar~This was really good...I did like it alot...But one thing I didnt understand...

It's just my heart,
Dont worry about it,
It's just a game!
What if i kissed you,
And led you to believe.
That my kiss wasnt just a kiss

Are you trying to tell this guy you are falling for him???Cause then you put this...

And it was more than it seems?

Ohh wait nevermind...I get it!!!

Good poem though!!!


~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~

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