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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
ARGH. This absolutely SUCKS. I hate writers block.... Vreni Cya You point your finger in my direction, Lay blame’s load without discretion. I laugh, and turn your finger ‘round, For in your story holes abound. Twasn’t I who cracked, ended all, Nay, dear, that was you, if I recall. And now you sob, whine and cry, Claim my words untrue, say I lie. Rejoice, my friend, for you are free, You may look, touch, all but me. This you wished, a blatant request Your needs, indeed, must be addressed. However, I must wait, sit very still, While your fantasies you fulfill. Remember, you’ve got baggage too, That first you must filter through! Oh, spare me you’re pathetic pathos, Au revoir, Caio, goodbye, Adios. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
You are amazing. I can't stop smiling. Who would do this to you and just leave you and such? You make me smile....the kind of smile that says "damn, this girl intrigues me"..... i would like to get to know you. Your ending was so witty and cool. perfect ending! I loved it......hahaha and i love you! You're the bomb!!!!!! You add a spark to this place. A lot of people are suddenly vanishing into thin air and it's beginning to worry me. Hardly any people post up or reply. People are gone!!!! But as long as YOU are still here i'll be happy cuz you just make my day with your poems. You intrigue me, and so does your poetry. Keep up the great work and i so hope to see more. adios!!  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
This was incredible. Great wording!!! I loved it..marvelous, simply marvelous...and don't EVER say ANY of your work sux. Cuz it doesn't!! Happy writing.. ~Carly I'm nobody, who are you? Are you nobody too? Then theres a pair of us-dont tell! They'd banish us, you know... |
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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
Awwww, Dopey - I think that's the biggest compliment someone's ever paid me so far as my poetry is concerned. Lol, I don't usually intrigue people - I simply scare them. lol. Feel free to email me @ vreni@iinc.com or im me at peanogrl83. Child - Thanks for the compliments! Vreni |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
The way you turned the blame around in this poem is great, it's written well. Sometimes writer's block only comes because you're saving up your writing for one gret poem to burst out. That's my explaination for this great poem anyway  nice job."Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I guess anyone who dates you and tries to break up should really be absolutely sure of what he's doing cause there's is no going back. You are a very strong girl. keep it up. I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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peanogrl83 Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 202 |
Lakewalker - thanks, I've always been good about avoiding blame! lol j/k. Thanks for replying! Acire - lol, well, I'm just not a girl that will sit on the sidelines and wait for someone. I'm far too "live for the moment" for that. Life's too short, so much do!! :.) Thanks for replying! Vreni |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
This IS great!! How can you say it sucks?? I wish I could write anything as good as this! Seriously though, you have a lot of talent, makes me jealous.  I especially like the last line. Keep writing, hasta luegoBel |
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