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sweetypie5
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0 posted 2000-10-17 06:28 PM



You walk out the door
Feeling no pain
Only I feel like
Everything is blowing up in my face
You have no clue that I am crying
Tears came with each happy memory
Which only brings more pain
And pain brings more tears
How could you do this to me?

I have no clue what I did
If only you could tell me
But you won't even speak to me
You shrug me off like I was nobody
Like I was someone you met just yesterday
I don't know what to do or say
How do I deal with this pain?

Don't you know
You meant everything to me
Do you know how much I love you
Do you know how much I care
Did you really care about me
Or was I just part of your game
I thought that you were different
But now I see I was wrong
Guys are all the same.

Come and show me that I'm wrong
Prove that you are different
I am asking you this is for mankind
Can't you be the one
Who doesn't play a game
Come back to me
Or I will never be the same
For I have never loved someone so great
As I have loved you
Don't you see I want to be
with you forever?
Because I love you my sweetheart.

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I live in the present but yearn for the past...
yet the future is so very near


[This message has been edited by sweetypie5 (edited 10-18-2000).]

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sweetstuff101
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since 2000-07-27
Posts 375
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1 posted 2000-10-17 07:52 PM


hey steph, I'm sorry you have to go through this. But i know what you are going through, cuz you told me about it!! I hope everything works out well for you, just remember love is tough, but life goes on. Well your poem was really beatiful, did you give it to him yet??? Great work, keep writing!!

Luv ya,
  Priscilla


~*~ YeStErDaY iS tHe PaSt, 2mOrRoW iS ThE fUtUrE, ToDaY iS a GiFt, ThAt'S wHy We CaLl iT ThE pReSeNt. ~*~



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2 posted 2000-10-17 07:53 PM


Well the thoughts were expressed well enough to see that you were in an immense amount of pain. BAD BAD! I don't like to see people in depression and such. Eneh Weh...... I'd like to just point out a line that kinda ticked me off

"Guys are all the same"

yea well......im sure you can already guess what im about to say so i won't even say it. Just interpret that. I, on the otherhand, do understand where you are coming from and do not take offense to it. I just hope you wrote it for the moment and do not seriously praise that view point. Eneh weh...bye

Good job! POST MORE! HURA!



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Lakewalker
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3 posted 2000-10-17 07:57 PM


I think you really expressed your thoughts well with this poem, well done.

"But you on't even speak to me
You shrug me off like I was nobody"

That should be "won't", but this part makes me think this guy is a jerk.  He won't even tell you why he left???


"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

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4 posted 2000-10-17 10:04 PM


Im sorry that you have to be going through this especially not knowing the reasons its happening. I can imagine it leaves you with a feeling of emptiness inside. I hope he realizes what he gave up and comes to his senses and comes back to you!

"Or was I just part of your game
I thought that you were different
But now I see I was wrong
Guys are all the same."

I shur hope all guys arent the same..

sweetypie5
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MWC,OK,USA
5 posted 2000-10-18 01:03 AM


Hey thanx for replying to my poem... let me just say that the line "guys are all the same" was a thing of the moment! I know guys are not all the same. I know this from experience but at the time I felt that! Once again thanx for repling to my poem!

I live in the present but yearn for the past...
yet the future is so very near

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6 posted 2000-10-18 10:00 AM


Very well expressed emotions.  I just hate seeing people in such pain.  If I was only "J. Coffey" from "Green Mile", I'd take away everyone's pain from them  

One thing though, I don't think all guys are the same.  Cause if you haven't noticed, a lot of the guys in here are going thru the same experiences as you are.  If you don't believe me, go thru all my poems and you'll realize what I mean

Keep ya head up

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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