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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
Now you're here Safe at home Now I feel better I am not alone I need your arms around me Wrap me in your embrace Kiss all my tears away That are streaming down my face Now that you are here Right where you belong Tell me where you've been Why were you gone so long? Don't you know I love you? Can't you see it in my eyes? It nearly killed me when you left I can't stand all these goodbyes! You're leaving again? Go ahead and pack No, these tears aren't for you This time, don't come back Inspired by the poem I wrote for my husband, but this poem will not come to pass. It was written for all the girls that wait for their true love to come home, just to have him leave over and over again, until they get fed up with it! You go girls!  < !signature--> ~*~SCG~*~ [This message has been edited by sweetcollege_girl (edited 10-18-2000).] |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I tried replying to this earlier but my computer is awesome so it attacked me. After reading the poem about your husband I thought "oh no!", but it's not about him. In the third stanza's second sentence, "elong" should be "belong", that stopped me for a second. Other than that this flowed well and was really good "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
haha yea i thought just like lake there for a second. I was like......NOOOOOOOooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo!!!!!!! And i even dove in slow motion. I have no idea why. Eneh Weh... this was a nice dedication to all those girls...... keep it up! great poem.  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
Thanks you two...I hope they appreciate it as well! ~*~SCG~*~ [This message has been edited by sweetcollege_girl (edited 10-18-2000).] |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
Stupid computer.....  [This message has been edited by sweetcollege_girl (edited 10-18-2000).] |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
Ditto [This message has been edited by sweetcollege_girl (edited 10-18-2000).] |
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chic Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 245yellville, Ar, U.S. |
itchy pointer finger there sis? hehe. Great poem. But mine was better LOL "Life is a game and we have to play, but in the end...we all die."-by me! |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
HA!! Whatever! I worked on this poem for 15 minutes trying to find the right words! Don't tell me your poem was better! LOL ~*~SCG~*~ |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
You poems have just told me your life in the past weeks or months. I thought you were finally happy till i read the end of the poem. I'm so sorry that you have to go thru all this. Beautiful poem though, well expressed I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
acire, I am happy....I am wonderfully happy...Rick is in Texas, but I know he'll be back...maybe this evening or tomorrow morning...*crosses fingers* heres hopin'! I wrote this poem, as I stated above, for the girls who wait for their loved ones to return over and over again, until they finally get tired of it, and tell him not to come back...this poem isn't about me.. Thanks for complimenting me though...again, I am totally, wonderfully happy!  ~*~SCG~*~ |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
SCG~ I still wonder why I do that...Sit around all the time and wait for my boyfriend...I honestly dont know...I love him but its just something that I dont like waiting around for...2 weeks ago he left for Mexico...Well when I hooked up with him I lost all my friends...Because I spent alot of time with him...Well when he left I couldnt believe it...It was so boring...But anyways I dont know why I am going on and on...You wrote a good poem here...And Im glad I got to read it...Keep up the good work!!! ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
Hey girl...ya kinda freaked me out with this one...i hope all is well wit you and your husband love ya, Tamma If you love someone dont put their name in a heart, put their name in a circle, because a heart can be broken but a circle is continious. |
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sweetcollege_girl Senior Member
since 1999-12-03
Posts 872just about where I want to be |
Yes, Tamma, Everything is fine. Don't worry!  ~*~SCG~*~ |
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