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buttercup411
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since 2000-07-03
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miami, fl, u.s

0 posted 2000-10-16 06:21 PM




my days have been made
the years have begone
i'm still undone


if i could find a place on this lonely earth....  
by your side unsurely it may lie
the world has no end
my time ha no rhyme
unsure of what tomorrow might bring
i turn my light on and cry
if it's fake love then surely there's no me
but if i could only reach you
maybe just maybe my life would be done


!@##)*(^&*+)_<><:"~^*&#@
sometimes i stand, sometimes i sit...
i never know what there is to know..
i never could write a poem..
: )

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1 posted 2000-10-16 07:20 PM



  Hey this was terrific...heh...that's all I can say...great job...happy writing...

   ~Carly

"I see," said the blind man to his deaf wife reading the newspaper.

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2 posted 2000-10-16 08:28 PM


Great joB! Hope to see more of your work on here.......



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

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Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
3 posted 2000-10-16 10:54 PM


"unsure of what tomorrow might bring
i turn my light on and cry"

This is whole poem is really well said, it's good writing!

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
4 posted 2000-10-17 01:25 AM


In my mind this poem made me think differently...I dont know if this is right or not but please tell me if I am wrong...It seems as if something went wrong...Im not sure what but thats what it seems...

~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~

buttercup411
Junior Member
since 2000-07-03
Posts 41
miami, fl, u.s
5 posted 2000-10-17 07:14 PM


yeah erin sumthing went wrong... just struggles with my mother...over just stupid stuff....thanks for the replies

!@##)*(^&*+)_<><:"~^*&#@
sometimes i stand, sometimes i sit...
i never know what there is to know..
i never could write a poem..
: )

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