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pharon Member
since 1999-11-13
Posts 251alabama |
peering around a corner i catch a glimpse of someone in an opposing mirror for a moment our eyes meet and i am taken aback. before i can catch it, a gasp of disbelief escapes me. i have heard that the eyes can paint a picture of their beholders heart...soul, the thought of this sends shivers down my spine as i quickly look away from this mirror that has mercilessly embedded this idea; that something so sad, dark even, could exsist in one so young full of life and vigor. yet, the eyes don't lie, and it frightens me how familiar these two seem. i dare to peer once again around the corner which serves as my shield from this darkness and as my eyes once again meet those of the reflection, i am caught off guard. this face i see shares my expression of fear and disbelief, and the eyes seem almost as if they are peering back at me. i do not cower behind the shelter of my corner anymore, but stay, staring intently at the image before me. this face, so bright and vibrant, could easily light up a room, if it weren't for the shadows which lie where the eyes should. and it dawns on me, the reflection, the face, the shadow-filled eyes are all my own |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Very well done Pharon! You've painted a great visual, and this holds such a wonderful message. We all need to take that step back, and look into our own reflections ...  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This is so good, I read it a couple of times. Nice work! ...I forgot to add that I'm horrible at coming up with titles, sorry.< !signature--> "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! [This message has been edited by Lakewalker (edited 10-14-2000).] |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
This was an amazing piece...I enjoyed it very much...Hope to see more work by you...Thanks for sharing it... ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
this was incredible! "weakened reflection" "mirror of fear" "shadowed reflection" "reality lurks" just some quick ideas for titles, good luck! jeremy r "...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I Got a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~ |
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pharon Member
since 1999-11-13
Posts 251alabama |
thank you guys for your response! i have been suffering from extreme writers block and this is my first poem in almost 3 months!!! i just sat down the other night around 1:00am (the best time to write of course) and out it came!! anyway -- i think i'm probably going to use "shadowed reflection" thanx for suggesting it jeremy pharon |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey!! This was really great. Shadowed reflection does fit. I love the word choices!! Happy writing!! ~Carly "I see," said the blind man to his deaf wife reading the newspaper. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
3 months!!!! wow, I think I'd go nuts if I couldn't write for that long and i agree late at night is a good time to write! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wow nice job......havent written for 3 months....... ive been there....... sometimes it's an escape from the escape writing induces. Anyway good job!  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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