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And then another one bites the dust... |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl 
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Maybe this time I'll try harder, Maybe now will be better. This one can be right, I need to be happy with someone one day... You are not the one, huh? I should've guessed; you're like the rest. Expect too much of you... Expect too much of me. Why can't I ever get this right? Is it never going to be okay? All alone seems better than this. All alone hurts like heck. I see you there, it's different now. I don't need you, you don't need me... What's left for us to say? I bid farewell, yet again. Sad but true, and another one bites the dust. [This message has been edited by Jenn Cirrincione (edited 10-13-2000).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well considering the title is from a song...... it's a great poem. I personally try not to copy lines from other songs, or people and such. But it did fit perfectly so i can't really condemn you for that. The poems messages sucks for you , ya know? I mean that really sucks that you can't get Mr. Right......but who does at our age? No many..... so all i'm sayin is ....patience is a virtue......no need in rushing things or people. You know you're cool.....just stay true and chilllllzzzzzz out with your friends like i do......adios  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Well, I realize that the title has already been used before...(well sort of) but many poems and songs have the same (or almost the same) titles... and they are completely different. Since the line does fit, and the poem is NOTHING like the song, I don't think it's wrong. I realize you weren't condemning me, I just figured I'd say that.  "Guess I'm not smart, I let you un-nerve me, I let you control me; afraid the truth would hurt me, when it's you that hurts me more." TLC |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This poem really tells your feelings well. I like it, but the situation behind it does suck as Dopey said. Anyway, good job! "Why can't I ever get this right? Is it never going to be okay?" "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!! |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
he'll come around, patience is a lesson in the course of love, stand firm, great poem jeremy r "...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I Got a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~ |
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