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0 posted 2000-10-13 03:21 PM


Your soft lips,
Your magical kiss,
I cant take it for any more,
Than it actually is.
It's a kiss of friendship,
Not the dedication of your heart.
How could i let this happen,
When did this start?
Your messing with my mind,
my feelings and my emotion.
Love me like i want you to,
Take my full devotion.
I can no longer withstand this pain,
My heart is a high price,
Darling this isnt just a game.
Love me,
Love me not.
If i continue on,
My heart is sure to rot.
I'm sub-consciously giving you my all.
I want to take it back,
Not care for you at all.
Why does a kiss of friendship,
Churn these feelings within?
Why cant i understand,
The relationship we're in.
I should know better,
Than to take it to this degree.
Your heart is dedicated to her,
I seem to forget that every now and then,
Silly me.
I'm really sorry for feeling this way,
I'll heal in some time.
But i cant help it you see,
My heart controls my mind.

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1 posted 2000-10-13 03:31 PM


Ouch... this is a tough situation. I'm usually under the control of my heart, but I'll offer you some advice: let it take you. Although you might get hurt, you shouldn't live your life wondering what would have happened if you let your heart lead the way. I know that love in a friendship is a difficult thing, but you just have to stay true to your heart.



False gems may shine as brightly as the genuine article, but there are always those who can tell the difference.



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2 posted 2000-10-13 04:07 PM


"I cant take it for any more,
Than it actually is.
It's a kiss of friendship,
Not the dedication of your heart."

This is so very well expressed, and it's a hard thing to go through.  I hope everything turns out the way you want it to, but for that to happen, you have to make it happen. Anyway, great job writing this one


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3 posted 2000-10-13 05:48 PM


Well i liked the poem and i hope things turn out well. I can't give you any good advice cuz i always think that the heart should just rule all. Anyway....adios!



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4 posted 2000-10-13 11:07 PM


extremely well written, i love it.
excellent to say the least.


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San, the dumb
San, the guy...

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