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Dopey Dope
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0 posted 2000-10-12 09:43 PM


Wrong Equation:


My life is crumbling away.
My feet try to walk but I stay.
I'm left alone and without a heart.
I wish that my life would have never start.

I breath but in breathing I die.
I smile but in smiling I cry.
Kill me, 3 times 2 isn't long.
It's all an equation that went wrong.



OK so this is the last of the 5th cycle. The 6th round is on it's way if i decide to post up at all. Uhhhhh....you have all endured my past well enough and i have realized that most of you prefered my stuff that i wrote in 9th grade. Who knows, maybe you'll like my resent stuff more than that *6th round*...... so without further ado....tomarrow you will all see my first posting of the CURRENT round of writing. ADios!




"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

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Morouxshi San
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1 posted 2000-10-12 10:13 PM


dope, this is the perfect prelude to the last cycle.

San, the wise
San, the dumb
San, the guy...

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2 posted 2000-10-12 10:16 PM


Excellent poem! I feel every single word that you wrote. Great job!
Salooma
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3 posted 2000-10-13 11:58 AM


wow....i really loved this one, i;d say it was one of the best.

"I breath but in breathing I die.
I smile but in smiling I cry."

those are wonderful lines....
salma

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4 posted 2000-10-13 02:30 PM


this is so well written! i loved it  
Lakewalker
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5 posted 2000-10-13 04:00 PM


Well Dopey, this is another great one.  So do I understand this right...you're skipping the 6th round??  Anyway, great poem man.

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

Dopey Dope
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6 posted 2000-10-13 06:32 PM


well there's no round to skip too. I am currently workong on the 6th round. I so far have about 120 pieces of work. I'm just not sure which ones to post up and so on. It has a vast variety of poem topics and so on. I'll post some up tonight, but my old ones. From about 4 months ago.


- glad you all liked this poem. thanks!



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

Lakewalker
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7 posted 2000-10-14 07:18 PM


Oh...i see

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

jeremydraul
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8 posted 2000-10-14 10:42 PM


when you say "My life is crumbling away.
My feet try to walk but I stay" i feel compatible with your feelings, another great one!

jeremy r


"...if you've never met me, then you've no right to judge me. I Got a good heart, but this heart can get ugly." ~DMX~

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