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IsGona
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0 posted 2000-10-12 08:58 PM




I know life is short
  but
    stilll
      I waste it
I need to wake up
and
   start
     to embrace it    

I said this before
but
   I want
    to say it bolder
every day that passes
I
  get
    one day older

life was a gift
so
  what
   will I give back?
I don't know yet
but
  I think....
I'm on the right track

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1 posted 2000-10-12 09:26 PM


This was a very refreshing poem! Its nice to hear someone say they want to live life to their fullest. Embrace each day and make the most out of it! Wonderful!!
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2 posted 2000-10-12 09:40 PM


I liked the format of the poem. It kept me reading because some poems just bore me with their everyday line after line after line kinda thing. I like your little diagonal shifting thing. Anyway......the poem itself was positive and nice. great job!



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

IsGona
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3 posted 2000-10-12 10:24 PM


xShUg..~  Thank you for the reply.  I delt with a coupl of deaths lately and my own mortality has been on the back of my mind lately. Just don't want to go w/ any regrets... ya know

Dopey~ Thank you as well.  I must confece.  I picked up this style of writing from some one else, but it is unique and I like it and use it in most my writting.  I know the poem was a little crued but it's been a while, I'm a bit rusty.  Thanks for replying any how

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4 posted 2000-10-13 11:53 AM


wow...wonderful writing. i loved it!!

salma

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5 posted 2000-10-13 03:54 PM


What a great attitude, we should go through every day as if it were a special gift.  The end of this is great!

"life was a gift
so
  what
   will I give back?
I don't know yet
but
  I think....
I'm on the right track"


"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

IsGona
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6 posted 2000-10-15 10:29 PM


thank you.  you are both very kind
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7 posted 2001-05-17 04:51 PM


Awwww. This is bittersweet. So sad that you dealt with facing your own mortality, and yet so important as well. Beautiful job on this!!

*hugs* Jenn

"If it's wrong to love you, then my heart just won't let me be right, cause I'm drowned in you, and I won't pull through without you by my side." Mari

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