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chic
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0 posted 2000-10-12 12:25 PM


Careful what you say,
careful what you see.
Beware of what may happen,
or you will surely lose me.

You say you will
You say you won't.
I'm never for sure
if you do or don't.

It's all in fun
it's all in play.
Careful what you do,
careful what you say.


"Life is a game and we have to play, but in the end...we all die."-by me!

© Copyright 2000 Barbara Mendoza - All Rights Reserved
jytree
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1 posted 2000-10-12 03:50 PM


Are you threating me???-corholeo

Good poem chic

early to rise,
early to bed,
make a man healthy,
But socially dead-Dot animantics.

but socially dead.

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2 posted 2000-10-12 09:31 PM


Nice poem, very simple and i liked it



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

Lakewalker
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3 posted 2000-10-13 02:44 PM


This really gets your point out, I like it how it's written.  Good poem

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

chic
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4 posted 2000-11-15 12:50 PM


Thanks guys!!!

jytree-I dunno...maybe

"Life is a game and we have to play, but in the end...we all die."-by me!

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5 posted 2000-11-15 03:12 PM


Very cool poem hun...i liked it!
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6 posted 2000-11-16 05:51 PM


isn't life just plain confusing?  People are too.....maybe you're searching for the answer in the wrong place.......thank and keep sharing

oh yeah, why do you hurt so much? i though i was the only one....i just posted one about how much i hurt, lately..like 5 days ago, i think u might like it if you read it  

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


chic
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7 posted 2000-11-17 12:15 PM


And here I was thinking I was the only one (well, me and the people in Sarajevo), but anyway I guess you could say that my life it that of a flower, there are those that say I'm pretty and then there's those who step on me for pleasure.  But I can't just come out and tell them to stop, so I deal with it and while it is boiling inside me, I write poetry about it so that I don't go past the boiling point.  If that makes any sense at all.

"Life is a game and we have to play, but in the end...we all die."-by me!

IsGona
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8 posted 2000-11-17 02:09 PM


I like how the poem was written playfully at the same time there is a sence of bitterness or resentment tward some one.  Very nicely written.
IsGona

"Every body has their destiny...
I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN"
~Hatebreed~

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