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sweetypie5
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since 2000-10-06
Posts 97
MWC,OK,USA

0 posted 2000-10-11 09:46 PM


As you hang up I shed a tear
I know that you are mad
I can't help the things I said
I try to call you back
But you won't even answer the phone
I start to think maybe this is the end
We have been through to much
For it to end this way
So please say you'll stay
The very next day I pull you aside
And ask you how you could act
Like everything is fine
I look into your eyes
And see a tear form
Please don't cry I whisper
It will only bring more pain
You start to tell me it can't be
But I shut you up again
If we try to work it out
Our relationship will be saved
Because this is not the first or last
Fight that we will be in
We'll hear a lot more of
I saw you look at her
And how could you even think about cheating
I love you to much to let you go
So please stay...  


Hey This is me and my work so I hpoe you like it???

© Copyright 2000 Stephanie Walker - All Rights Reserved
Caz
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since 2000-09-13
Posts 133
ConcepciĆ³n, Chile
1 posted 2000-10-11 09:54 PM


Hey, Welcome to Passions. You'll find here people that can help you out a lot, I have made so many friends here, so whenever you want just send me an email or an ICQ message.
Well, what can I say, great first post, I really liked the poem. But I don't know much about the background of it, so maybe you could email me. Great first post, and hope to see you again soon.
Bye, your friend,
                                Caz

It's been raining since you left me.

darkstar
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since 2000-08-09
Posts 230
Port Richey, Fl, USA
2 posted 2000-10-11 10:26 PM


Awwww....I've had that happen to me a few times....it sucks...I hope it goes well...great poem and welcome to passions..

Dark Star

LyricFetish
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since 2000-01-13
Posts 528
North Carolina
3 posted 2000-10-11 10:56 PM


Well, you've come to the right place, sweetypie! Everyone in here can definately relate to this situation, and I know how much it sucks. Here, consider yourself virtually hugged. Really nice poem, hope you stick around! Peace.

*~Meredith~*

I'll just keep on laughing,
Hiding the tears in my eyes...
*Oleander

DancinQueen
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA
4 posted 2000-10-11 11:22 PM


Welcom to Passions   This was a great first post. And from what im comprehending, your bf cheated on you, you got in a fight, said some mean stuff and now you feel bad?? I've been there plenty of times..you shoudlnt feel bad, he should be begging for your forgiveness, you didnt do a thing ..dont put yourself into the position of reparing your relationship because he did the wrong here. lol ok theres my advice   keep up te great work

~!*DQ*!~


"One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be"
~Carol King

Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
5 posted 2000-10-12 02:14 AM


Welcome to passions!!!I hope that you enjoy it here as much as I do...

Good first post...I hope that you share more of your work with us!!!


~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~

sweetstuff101
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since 2000-07-27
Posts 375
OK, USA
6 posted 2000-10-12 07:24 AM


Hey Steph!! Great poem, things will all work out, if you give them time, just keep ur head up till then. Well nice work, Keep writing!

LYLAS,
  Priscilla
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~*~ YeStErDaY iS tHe PaSt, 2mOrRoW iS ThE fUtUrE, ToDaY iS a GiFt, ThAt'S wHy We CaLl iT ThE pReSeNt. ~*~





[This message has been edited by sweetstuff101 (edited 10-12-2000).]

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
7 posted 2000-10-12 03:46 PM


Welcome to Passions
I think you did a wonderful job of expressing this situation, and I hope everything works the way you want it to.  Please keep sharing your poems with us


"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

Acies
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8 posted 2000-10-12 05:43 PM


Welcome to Passions!!!  You expressed your feelings so well in your first post.  I am looking forward to reading more of your poems.  So, please keep shring.  Keep ya head up ok  

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


sweetypie5
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since 2000-10-06
Posts 97
MWC,OK,USA
9 posted 2000-10-12 06:06 PM


Thanx for replying to thie poem!!! I really didn't think to put a background on it so here is one now! Right now my b/f and i are fine. We were on the verge of breaking up over some pretty stupid stuff. I gave him this poem to read and it was like you really feel this way??? And now we both try harder to make stuff work so it's all okay now I guess!

I live in the present but yearn for the past...
yet the future is so very near

sweetypie5
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since 2000-10-06
Posts 97
MWC,OK,USA
10 posted 2000-11-04 04:04 PM


Hey peeps please repl to this poem! K??? Thanx

When boys are four they will give you thier gum, but when they are forteen they won't even give you the time of day...


Dopey Dope
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San Juan, Puerto Rico
11 posted 2000-11-04 04:43 PM


Hey this was great. Yea relationships are hard to keep going but when you find the right person you have a better chance of prevailing. Good luck and i hope things stay fine!



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

curlygurly
Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276
USA
12 posted 2000-11-04 05:23 PM


Great first post. I really liked it. I can totally understand, relationships can be hard and full of pain. great poem  
Curlz


"So many tears i've cried, so much pain inside"
-Lenny Kravitz


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13 posted 2000-11-04 05:54 PM


Hey gurl!! Welcome to passions!! First off...great first post!! I am really relieved to hear that everything is fine between you and your BF now. Sometimes it just takes a small reminder to let them know how much you really do care...and thats what this is! thank god for poems huh?? Great job and i cant wait to see more!
Kit McCallum
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14 posted 2000-11-05 08:11 AM


Welcome to Passions SweetyPie!

We are very happy you have decided to join our community of poetry friendship.

You've expressed yourself well in this first post. I hope to read more of your poetry and your responses to our wonderful family of poets! (check your e-mail for a special message)

Best wishes,
/Kit


[This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 11-05-2000).]

apsara
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since 2000-11-09
Posts 70

15 posted 2000-11-10 06:23 AM


Its great that everything turned well for you and that was something that I think a lot of people can relate to as well.

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