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Dopey Dope
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0 posted 2000-10-10 03:38 PM


Everything is Fake:


Hate me girls,
And hate me boys.
You're all I love,
But still my toys.

Hate me animals,
And hate me plants.
Nothing goes right.
Not even romance.

Hate me devil,
And hate me God.
I always screw up.
Say yes and nod.

Hate me false,
And hate me true.
Everything is fake.
Even all of you.





I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


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1 posted 2000-10-10 03:44 PM


This is a really unique poem! I liked it a lot! Great job!!

"Hate me false,
And hate me true.
Everything is fake.
Even all of you."

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2 posted 2000-10-10 04:11 PM


Very interesting POV dopey. I probably don't completely understand what you're saying by it, but it's creative.
* keep it up... etc!*    
Jenn< !signature-->

"He's mastered the art, of looking sincere, his eyes have a way, of making you stay, don't look in the mirror"- Chely Wright


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3 posted 2000-10-10 05:20 PM


What's a POV?



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


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4 posted 2000-10-10 06:27 PM


wow this poem was very different but i get where you're comin from! another great poem!  
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5 posted 2000-10-10 09:39 PM



  Hey Javi. Great poem. Fake people are VERY not cool...way to express that...wooo okay well buhbye. happy writing!!

    ~Carly

"I see," said the blind man to his deaf wife reading the newspaper.

Caz
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6 posted 2000-10-10 09:40 PM


Great poem, I liked it, I think it's kind of deep...
Could you please explain me a little bit, I think that there must be more than what I get.
Thanks, bye, your friend,
                                          Caz

It's been raining since you left me.

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7 posted 2000-10-11 11:25 AM


Dopey, wow. this can be sooooooo true sometimes.              
I like it!!!! See ya. Love you!!! Allysa


Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see.

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8 posted 2000-10-11 03:00 PM


I'm pretty sure POV is Point Of View, and I agree, it's very interesting.  I like how this is written, it flows very well.

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

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9 posted 2000-10-11 03:12 PM


Wow this was great!!You fit all the words together like a puzzle. It was an awsome poem Dopey. Keep it up man!! smiles ¤poe¤

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10 posted 2000-10-11 03:44 PM


awww Dopey...i love it...and i luv ya...
Tamma

(ps im thinking about coming back   )

If you love someone dont put their name in a heart,
put their name in a circle, because a heart can be broken
but a circle is continious.



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11 posted 2000-10-11 04:06 PM


hmmmmmmm, when I read this this morning, I had no idea it would apply to my life in a few hours. my head hurts so bad and the one person who understood me won't care if I tell him how my life sucks, so im gonna tell you.
First, Justin and I broke up.Then, As you already know, a close friend of mine was murdered. A week later, my best friend switched schools. Now my other best friend might get kicked out of my school and another of my friends is dealing with drugs and the consiquences of taking them and getting caught. Along with that, for some odd reason, I wanted to jump off a bridge about a week ago, but I can't take care of my own probs now b/c I have to help my friends. they depend on me. And im only in jr. high (8)
Ugggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggggg.
So anyways, I relate to your poem more than I thought. I love you Dopey!!!!! More than you know!!!!!

Allysa

Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see.

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12 posted 2000-10-11 08:00 PM


Allysa, im sorry you're going through all this stuff. It licks and i know it. We've all been through a lot of stuff and believe me, some even worse than you. Being in 8th grade is tough and so is the rest of the way. All i can say is to stay true to yourself and just keep going. I can't really say to keep your head up cuz sometimes the weight is just too low to even think about it. But just keep pressing on!! I love you and im glad you seem to kinda like me somewhat.....hehe.....makes me feel a bit special. Love you lots and smile for me babe....



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

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13 posted 2000-10-12 02:37 AM


Very intresting but good...Thanks for sharing...

BTW...Whats with that quote about the socks???


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14 posted 2000-10-12 07:44 AM


Great work once again.  This poem flows very nicely and shows your unique talent well   Nice job bud    talk to you soon!!
~*Justine*~

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15 posted 2000-10-12 10:38 AM


very good poem dope. very deep. i dont get the socks thing either...

San, the wise
San, the dumb
San, the guy...

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16 posted 2000-10-12 01:59 PM


Well san, i just wrote the socks thing in Puerto Rican history class and found it amusing......so yea.



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

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17 posted 2000-10-12 11:09 PM


I like the way your mind works.  And you express some interesting views that I think alot of ppl, including my self, can relate to.  I think your part of the minority that sees the majority for what it really is.  A bunch of little puppets whose opinions can annoy you but in the big picture you know how petty they really are.  I hope I'm not way out in right field here but this is what ran through my head after reading this.

"Every body has their destiny...
I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN"
~Hatebreed~
"I am, who I am
and what you think,
I don't give a damn"
Chilli Peppers


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18 posted 2000-10-12 11:09 PM


I like the way your mind works.  And you express some interesting views that I think alot of ppl, including my self, can relate to.  I think your part of the minority that sees the majority for what it really is.  A bunch of little puppets whose opinions can annoy you but in the big picture you know how petty they really are.  I hope I'm not way out in right field here but this is what ran through my head after reading this.

"Every body has their destiny...
I'LL CHOOSE MY OWN"
~Hatebreed~
"I am, who I am
and what you think,
I don't give a damn"
Chilli Peppers


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19 posted 2000-10-12 11:17 PM


Well you're pretty right about that. I do "seem" to see thigns in a dif. light. You oughta read my other poems like...uh....the ones abotu society. but anyway thanks!



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

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20 posted 2000-10-13 09:43 AM


That is some deep work dopey if I wasn't on a computer I was appulad you but I think you get the point so Good job

early to rise,
early to bed,
make a man healthy,
But socially dead-Dot animantics.

but socially dead.

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21 posted 2000-10-13 11:37 AM


dopey....i gotta say quite the unique piece you got here. very different, but nice as well.

salma

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22 posted 2000-10-14 02:48 PM


I know its about time I get off my lil butt and reply but now I found some time on a Saturday doin nothing and at the library =) I loved your poem it was great, not too complex not to hard and didn't go way over my head =) hehe what I'm getting at is that I know where you and your words are coming from but I Hope I don't sound too conceited and if I do I guess I have to go back to where I came from and start all over again =Þ btw your lil quote born myself and bla bla bla *can't think of it all off of the top of her head* my friend I used to work with likes it alot, she digs it and she's twice my age..anywho, keep up the good work, and I truly believe you are far more talented then me..hell I think everybody is far more talented then me..

Love,
Kristen

"Fear not my dear for I am forver here, never leaving never steering clear of any dangers that lie deep within your heart" ~moi~


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23 posted 2000-10-15 02:57 AM


Love the poem, and the way your mind works.  My favorite part was

Hate me false,
And hate me true.
Everything is fake.
Even all of you.

Keep up the great work..

-Stephanie

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24 posted 2000-10-15 12:36 PM


...I was wondering about the socks thing too, you just came up with it in class, I thought for for sure it had to be in a movie or something, but no, it just came out of that head of yours  ...< !signature-->

"Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Me!!

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25 posted 2000-10-15 01:13 PM


HAha lakewalker......yea well almost everything i do or say comes out of my own head.........cept some catch phrases from the movie Mall Rats......Snoochie Boochies!!!
Ok so yea hehe..bye!



"I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust."

I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them!

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