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You said you'd never leave (Please read)
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You said you'd never leave (Please read) |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden 
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You said you'd never leave, that you would always be there. I trusted you with my secrets, and it turns out you didn't care. I told you all the secrets, that I kept locked up inside. All the bad things that happened at school, and my thoughts on suicide. You said you'd never let that happen, I wouldn't go out like that. I trusted you to love me, and you couldn't even do that. And now you expect me to listen, to what you have to say. When you tell me you can't take it, you can't make my pain go away. But what if I trusted you, to never ever leave. I never thought you'd be the one, to lie and to decieve. And what does it matter, if my thoughts I decide. Would you care at all, if I commited suicide? Of course you'd blame my enemies, my family, and even me. But you know that I always loved you, that was just something you couldn't see. --------------------------------------------------- Alright, this is kinda old. So don't go thinking that I'm gonna go jump off a bridge, alright? I made the team for this writing contest in my area!!!!!  Allysa***It took a day to know Jesica, but it will take years and years to ever forget her*** Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see. |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey this was great!! Very well written. And congrats on the contest thing!! ~Carly "I see," said the blind man to his deaf wife reading the newspaper. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Whoa this was an amazing poem. I often feel this way about someone...someone who promised me he'd always be by my side. I dont think i could possibly relate any more to this poem. Great job! "And now you expect me to listen, to what you have to say. When you tell me you can't take it, you can't make my pain go away." |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This is very well written, I like it. It seems like you really got your emotions out with this poem. Congrats on the being on the team |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Allysa~ You just poured it out didnt you???Good work...I liked it...It sucks when you grow to trust someone then lose their trust...But it happens to us all...I know it happened to me...Keep it up... ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Child: Thanks for repliyng, and thanks much!! Sugarhigh: Did you get burned too? Lakewalker: Hmm, so you like this one, huh? Thanks for the congrats. Erin: Guess what? it was about Justin. No surpirse there, huh? well bye everyone!!!! ***It took a day to know Jesica, but it will take years upon years to foreget her*** Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well great job on making the writing team, im proud of you. good poem too!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Well, atleast someone's proud of me. Didja ever write the spoon poem?? Because if you did, I don't remember reading it. Love you, Allysa Don't wander throught this glassy surface, expecting to find more than me, because what I am without a purpose, but a lone mirage to see. |
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Pixie-Babe03 Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 387Central Maine |
this si very well written, a great poem sorry you had to go through this! ~*Pixie*~ |
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sweetstuff101 Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 375OK, USA |
You really got me on this one. It's like you know EXACTLY what it going on w/ me and my best best friend. She is mad at me for something you mentioned in your poem. It is really getting to me, I wish I knew how to fix it  Well great poem, keep writing!!Much Luv, Sweetstuff< !signature--> ~*~ YeStErDaY iS tHe PaSt, 2mOrRoW iS ThE fUtUrE, ToDaY iS a GiFt, ThAt'S wHy We CaLl iT ThE pReSeNt. ~*~ [This message has been edited by sweetstuff101 (edited 10-11-2000).] |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
can't believe i missed this one. You really write good allysa, so it doesnt surprise me that you made the team........write more I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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