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Going Out With a Bang (goodbye)
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Going Out With a Bang (goodbye) |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV 
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Well this will be my final post for awhile, so im going to make the most of it..... ~*~ What Might Become ~*~ Have you ever wondered Just what it is I see When I look so deep Into your eyes? I see our life together I see our children I see what might become Of us together But most likely not. I wonder where I went wrong Was it when I gave him my heart, Or was it really me That went wrong? He brought me to you He doesn’t know But I’m grateful for that I had to go through the pain To become happy with you. Have you ever seen Our life together Have you seen our children Do you know what might become Of this relationship? ~*~ Justin ~*~ Hold me close, Take my heart, Hold my hand, I love you. Kiss my lips, Love me true, Just once more, I love you. ~*~ Only a Dream ~*~ He tries to push his hands, But I push him away, Enraging him even more. I keep insisting That he stops, Eventually, he gets the picture, And drags me to the car, To take me home. I sit there and cry, Not knowing what’s next, He places his hand on my leg, And I shiver in fear. I start to sweat, And open my eyes, And heave a sigh of relief, It was only a dream. ~*~ Goodbye ~*~ It’s been great, But I’m leaving now. I’ve been ridiculed For my writing When it comes directly From my heart. I may be back From tyme to tyme But I’m just not sure, Too many other things, On my mind. I’ll still reply, When I can, But I’ll not post again. If you love someone dont put their name in a heart, put their name in a circle, because a heart can be broken but a circle is continious. |
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Caz Member
since 2000-09-13
Posts 133Concepción, Chile |
You already know what I think about this. I really don't think you should be doing this. I'm sorry anyway, but I respect your point of view.... < !signature--> It's been raining since you left me. [This message has been edited by Caz (edited 10-09-2000).] |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Tamma, these were all exceptionally well written hon! Each one! I'm concerned ... I don't know what you are referring to regarding "being ridiculed", because you have terrific talent. Should there "ever" be a reason that you're uncomfortable in these forums, please contact myself or one of the other moderators immediately. This is a family forum, and all members should feel comfortable and safe posting in this environment. I will review this further Tamma, and keep writing, you have a genuine talent! |
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Virgin Suïcide Member
since 2000-08-11
Posts 319Netherlands |
ey, you really really shouldnt stop posting!! I know, I'm also away for a while, but I'm sure I'll get back...just need to figure some stuff out! but your work is just great and I really enjoy reading it!!! so PLEASE STAY!!!! luvz, VS All of my life Where have you been I wonder if I'll Ever see you again ~*~*~Lenny Kravitz-Again~*~*~ |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Aww Tamma please dont go! I love every single poem that you've submitted and i think you have a lot of talent! I'm sorry that you feel your being ridiculed in anyway. There are many critics out there but stay strong in your writing. I was once told that there are no laws in art. I respect your decision but we'll all miss you and be waiting your return! Dont be gone for long! xoxo, michele |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Wow, "only a Dream" was very powerful. Please please please don't go! Please! You write very moving poems and I hope you keep sharing them. |
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Jacman Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291Dwight Il, US |
Tamma, I'm sorry to hear that you are leaving but I know what you are talking about with your poetry being ridiculed. Sometimes cencorship is more than what cencorship should be. But this is a free country and what comes from the heart cannot be stopped nor should it be. Keep writing no matter what and I will hope to see your work soon. jason  I'm not concieted...I'm convinced. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Tamma....I was here when you first joined our board. It was a pleasure to read and reply to your work because you were eager to learn and improve yourself. You have done this with leaps and bounds. Do not let yourself become discouraged because of the pace of the forums. Be strong in who you are aznd the strength of your work. You are young and strong and talented. Whatever your decision is I respect it. May the sun shine brightly on your face no matter where your path leads you my friend.  When you are old and grey and full of sleep, And nodding by the fire, take down this book, And slowly read, and dream of the soft look Your eyes had once, and of their shodows deep; How many loved your moments of glad grace, And loved your beauty with love false or true, But one man loved the pilgrim soul in you, And loved the sorrows of your changing face... William Butler Yeats |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
if yall keep on like this...ya might just force me to stay... If you love someone dont put their name in a heart, put their name in a circle, because a heart can be broken but a circle is continious. |
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Tamma
since 2000-01-17
Posts 794In His Arms, Harpers Ferry, WV |
Welp, I guess this is just one last Goodbye  ...i dont really wanna leave, but it feels as if i must...If you love someone dont put their name in a heart, put their name in a circle, because a heart can be broken but a circle is continious. |
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