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Caz
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0 posted 2000-10-08 08:55 PM


My love for you (to Heather)

My love for you is like the sky,
So big and wide like all his lies.
All the time I wonder why,
You can not be right at my side.

My love for you is like the sea,
So deep and strong, wild and free.
The only future that I can see,
Is a life with you eternally.

My love for you is like the day,
So long and slow with you away.
The only thing that I can say,
Is that I need you here to stay.

My love for you is like the night,
So clean and pure, and blind to sight.
I won’t let you go without a fight,
I just want to hold you tight.

My love for you is like a feather,
So soft and sweet, just like you Heather.
Trust in me, I won’t lie never,
My love for you will last forever.

Hi, do you believe in internet love? Well, I wrote this poem for the girl I love, she is the one that keeps my flame burning. She is the angel that saved my life (and I mean it) and I just wanted to thank her, so I thought this could be a good way.
I hope you liked it, thanks for reading it.
Your friend
Caz
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It's been raining since you left me.




[This message has been edited by Caz (edited 10-08-2000).]

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1 posted 2000-10-08 09:21 PM


Awwwwwww this was so very sweet. I liked it a lot buddy and i hope all goes well with you and Heather. Good luck!




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2 posted 2000-10-08 09:47 PM


That poem was so sweet!! I bet she absolutely loved it! Its great to have someone that makes you feel that way. The poem was very intense...aww it was so cute!!
Vball Chickie1624
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3 posted 2000-10-08 10:51 PM


That's such a sweet poem!  I'm going to go out on a limb here, but I think there is such a thing as internet love, you really get to know a person's real personality through here, i mean yes there will be fake people obviously, but i think it's great that you found someone you can share stuff with, even if it is on the net! good luck in the future! keep writing!

love
Danielle  

"I Told Him I Loved Him and the feelings were mutual...He Loved Himself too."

X_me_X
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4 posted 2000-10-08 11:21 PM


oh my god this poem was sooooooo amazing
i loved it
its soo sweet
i wish i hadda guy who could express his feelins half as well as you did! this poem wus great the gurl mus be pretty special and she mus feel pretty special to hava guy writin about her like that
newayz loved ur work
latez

~All is forgiven but NEVER forgotten~

Kit McCallum
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5 posted 2000-10-09 10:02 AM


Wonderful Caz! Such sweet and tender sentiments, and I liked the way you consistently began each stanza ... excellent flow in this poem. Very nicely written!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Virgin Suïcide
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6 posted 2000-10-09 11:43 AM


first off:great poem Caz!!! I loved it and I'm Really Really sure Heather will love it too!!

second: jupzzz I believe in internet love!! also becuz you first get to know the real person, his/her inside...so I guess it's more solid when you get to meet and can be together... *hehe, and I know you REALLY love her  *

But this was again SO sweet!! heather is SO lucky to have you!!

luvz ya always!!!
*kiss* Renée


All of my life
Where have you been
I wonder if I'll
Ever see you again

~*~*~Lenny Kravitz-Again~*~*~


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7 posted 2000-10-09 01:51 PM


Yes, very nice poem, it's so sweet   These lines are great:

"My love for you is like the night,
So clean and pure, and blind to sight."


Caz
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Concepción, Chile
8 posted 2000-10-09 06:47 PM


Wooow, thanks guys, I really really appreciate your replies, it means a lot to me. Now, I'll just have to wait for her... I'm kind of nervous.
Well, that's a good point you said Danielle, there are many many fake people in the internet, but after a while you get to know eachother. I'm so very in love, and the most exciting is that I might meeet her in february... I can't wait.
Thanks again, this makes me feel great, thanks. Bye.
Your friend,
                    Caz

It's been raining since you left me.

Fearless_Angel
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9 posted 2000-10-09 10:45 PM


Hey Caz:
    AW! That was so sweet. I think it was the sweetest one I've read today! I wish I could express my feelings to miah sweetie like you can! You should give this to her ok? Well, hope to hear from you soon, okies? Keep writing for every1! Buh_bye!
                       Lotsa Love,
                               Angel

Erin
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10 posted 2000-10-10 01:34 AM


Caz~
This is so sweet...She must be some girl!!!Glad to hear that she is really special to you...I think god gives us that one person to help us in a time of need...I know he gave me someone...


~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~

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11 posted 2000-10-11 04:46 PM


i know whatcha mean this poem is pretty dang good keep it up

"what doesnt kill you only makes you stronger"

Monica Ash
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12 posted 2000-10-11 06:31 PM


This poem was really good i hope that every thing works out for this special girl!!!! Tell her how you feel she just might surprise you but please check out my 2 new poems Loving Willy and Remembering the night we ment and tell me what you think please!!!!
              Monica

Caz
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since 2000-09-13
Posts 133
Concepción, Chile
13 posted 2000-10-11 08:50 PM


Hey, thanks for the replies, I appreciate it.

Angel, do you really think that I should give this poem to her?

Erin, well, what can I say, I totally agree with you, she's my life right now, I wake up and wait all day just to talk to her.

Branden726, thanks for the comment.

Monica, of course I'm going to read your poems  

Well, thanks again guys, I really mean it.
Your friend,
                    Caz

It's been raining since you left me.

LyricFetish
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Posts 528
North Carolina
14 posted 2000-10-11 11:29 PM


I want to commend you on your poem. And the way I see things, 'internet love' is just the next step thanks to technology. Dating branched off of arranged marriages. Then came long distance relationships, and now we have love via the world wide web. Most impressive. Rock on!

*~Meredith~*

I'll just keep on laughing,
Hiding the tears in my eyes...
*Oleander

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