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Jenn Cirrincione
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0 posted 2000-10-08 12:10 PM


Who can I depend on, in this frightful world?
You deny me, you burn me, you sting.
I am relying on empty promises, and lost days.
I think I know what I need; you, and your approval?

You laugh secretly, after I put my trust in who you are.
My faith is fading, who can I count on?
My life revolves around the fact that you need me, too.
Did you ever??

I realize I must only trust in me, for everyone has imperfections.
Everybody feeds their own self-centered urges.
It's only human to have flaws.
In the end, it's only me... and my own approval.




"He's mastered the art, of looking sincere, his eyes have a way, of making you stay, don't look in the mirror"- Chely Wright

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1 posted 2000-10-08 12:21 PM


Great poem!  I love hearing people say things like this "In the end, it's only me... and my own approval."  Very well done
Jenn Cirrincione
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2 posted 2000-10-08 02:26 PM


Thank you Lakewalker. I love it when I can feel that way.
Jenn  

"He's mastered the art, of looking sincere, his eyes have a way, of making you stay, don't look in the mirror"- Chely Wright

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3 posted 2000-10-08 02:42 PM


Jenn~
This was amazing!!!

Who can I depend on, in this frightful world?

I finally realized my best friend is who I can depend...Its a long story...And I just realized it last night that I could depend on her...She may not always be around when I need her but she will always be there for me...


~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~

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4 posted 2000-10-08 10:36 PM


There are ppl in life whom you can depend on hun, you just need to be able to see who they are. Your conclusion is very correct though, you only need the approval of you and no one else.

Nice job.  




When you are old and grey and full of sleep,
And nodding by the fire, take down this book,
And slowly read, and dream of the soft look
Your eyes had once, and of their shodows deep;

How many loved your moments of glad grace,
And loved your beauty with love false or true,
But one man loved the pilgrim soul in you,
And loved the sorrows of your changing face...

William Butler Yeats

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5 posted 2000-10-08 11:25 PM


wow this wus great
i really loved it
cuz its like u read my mind
that is exactly how i feel
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6 posted 2000-10-09 08:32 PM


I agree with Marilyn.  There are people in this world that you could rely or depend on.  People's imperfections shouldn't make you shy away from them at all. Think about it

Great write and keep sharin

keep your head up

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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7 posted 2000-10-10 02:30 PM


Yep i agree with all those people, there are some lucky individuals who do gain the trust to be depended on. I mean, yea..... some people out there are actually worth the time and energy to love completely and hornorably. Hope you find something like that



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


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