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Kevin
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0 posted 2000-10-07 10:36 PM


I wish that you could read my mind
And know my love is true
For lately I have come to find
I only think of you
And maybe you can’t be with me
To put my mind at ease
But you still left your memory
To bring me to my knees
I know you always meant to keep
My heart beside your own
But as I rest my eyes to sleep
I know my hearts alone

I wish that I could read your mind
And know you think of me
But still I fear that I would find
That your heart has gone free
Just know my thoughts will always be
With you and what we’ve been
With hopes that you still think of me
The way that you did then


© Copyright 2000 Kevin Bednarz - All Rights Reserved
Alwye
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1 posted 2000-10-07 10:41 PM


Sounds like a tough situation to be in....well written Kevin, as always.  

*Krista Knutson*

"Wheresoever you go, go with all your heart." -Confucious

sweetstuff101
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2 posted 2000-10-07 10:44 PM


that was really good!! Great job, Keep writing!!

Luv,
~*~SweetStuff~*~


~*~ YeStErDaY iS tHe PaSt, 2mOrRoW iS ThE fUtUrE, ToDaY iS a GiFt, ThAt'S wHy We CaLl iT ThE pReSeNt. ~*~


Lakewalker
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3 posted 2000-10-07 10:53 PM


Kevin, I like this, it's very well written.  You express yourself in a great way.  I don't think I've ever replied to one of your poems (maybe I have though??) so I'll say hi   
Kit McCallum
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4 posted 2000-10-08 07:34 AM


Excellent Kevin! A perfect tempo throughout to compliment these tender sentiments, really well done!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Jenn Cirrincione
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5 posted 2000-10-08 02:46 PM


This is very pretty; well written.
It flowed very well, good job.
Jenn

"He's mastered the art, of looking sincere, his eyes have a way, of making you stay, don't look in the mirror"- Chely Wright

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6 posted 2000-10-08 02:48 PM


Great job kevin. I like the way you express yourself. It flows rather nicely.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


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