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FitchGirl1896
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0 posted 2000-10-07 07:03 PM


~* The promise never kept *~
You promised you’d always love me
Said you’ll always be there
But where are you now, can I ask you where?
You promised your love you be true
And always be faithful till the end
But then you broke my heart
And now it’s to late for it to mend
You promised you’d never leave my side
But now you’re not standing here
And its too much pain to abide
You promised that we would never be apart
But the whole thing is
You never promised to break my heart

~*This is to my ex, who never treated me like I was worth something, but now he wants me back.(like thats going to happen)

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1 posted 2000-10-07 07:13 PM


You want us to be honest? OK.  I really liked it. The poem is really well written and really full of emotion.  Thanks for sharing this   keep writing

I promise   that if you keep writing, I'll keep reading em  

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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2 posted 2000-10-07 10:44 PM


I agree with Acire....I liked the poem a lot. I thought it was very cute!

I loved the line...
"You never promised to break my heart"

Alwye
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3 posted 2000-10-07 10:47 PM


This guy definitely does not deserve to have you back....very well written, I enjoyed this!

*Krista Knutson*

"Wheresoever you go, go with all your heart." -Confucious

Erin
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4 posted 2000-10-08 02:38 PM


But the whole thing is
You never promised to break my heart

Good choice of words!!!I liked this...Keep up the good work...



~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~

Lakewalker
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5 posted 2000-10-08 02:43 PM


This is very well done, it really explains your feelings well.
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6 posted 2000-10-09 10:58 AM


yanno, when i first came here to passions, if you added "please reply" to your title, htat made it so less ppl replyed, but i guess things have gotten easier around here...good poem btw

If you love someone dont put their name in a heart,
put their name in a circle, because a heart can be broken
but a circle is continious.



Monica Ash
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7 posted 2000-10-09 05:04 PM


That was a very good poem reminds me of my ex!!!!!! I would not even be his friend if I were you. But take a look at my poem and tell me what you think it's Second Chance!!!!! Hope to see more poems.......
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8 posted 2000-10-09 05:08 PM


I liked this one. Please, take it from experience, the guy will sweet talk you, push you, pressure you. Don't give in!! He isn't worth it, ok?
Keep writing!- Jenn


"He's mastered the art, of looking sincere, his eyes have a way, of making you stay, don't look in the mirror"- Chely Wright

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