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curlygurly
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0 posted 2000-10-07 03:40 PM


what kind of pain could he be going through
the thought of possibly dying
what kind of things are running through his head
does he let anyone know?
the possible things he is thinking
so much that runs through his head
what about work?
what about my family?
where am i gonna get the money to pay for this?
what a costly expense
but it's worth saving the life
of one that you love
soon starts treatments
he's like a painting now
with tattooed black dots
and a drawing like a field goal
what will he turn into?
he will be sick
he will be weak
he will be tired
he won't be able to eat
and his body will be worn and scarred
is it true his hearing will be gone forever?
we only wait
await what will come
await the future
await more pain


"i've kissed the moon a million times, danced with the angels in the sky"
enrique iglesias


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Isabel Galaxia
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1 posted 2000-10-07 04:01 PM


Well, for the most part I guess you're right.  But look at it this way, he's gonna be able to handle it.  I know you aren't into all this kind of stuff, but people have told me that God never gives you more than you can handle.  It'll be fine, really.  Okay I don't want to sound too corney here so I'll stop.  Great poem girl, keep writing SMILE, if not for you than for dad    
Bel


Beautiful is empty
Beautiful is free
Beautiful loves no one
Beautiful stripped me
-"Beautiful" CREED

Child of the Stars
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2 posted 2000-10-07 04:07 PM



  Hey. Terrific piece of writing here. Take a look at my signature.....

   ~Carly

Better days are on the way, my friend, just a ways on down the line.
I believe that just around the bend, everythings gonna be fine...

branden726
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3 posted 2000-10-07 04:18 PM


wow, extremely great i mean it touches me in some ways other poems dont not all are this sad and great at the same time the 2 things never work but you somehow make it....i think when ppl write sad things theres a lot of anger in there to that just totaly pumbles the poem but you made it work good job

"what doesnt kill you only makes you stronger"

Kit McCallum
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4 posted 2000-10-07 05:40 PM


You expressed your thoughts and questions well here Curlz ... it's so difficult to know how one might react to the struggles with health until it does happen.

I've found that when I was going through many health problems myself, those I appreciated the most, were the friends and family who asked me about many of these things. They gave me a chance to talk and not feel as alone.

Don't be afraid to open the lines of communication. I hope and trust things will go well.  

Best wishes and hugs,
/Kit

Lakewalker
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5 posted 2000-10-07 06:06 PM


This poem is very moving.  I'm sorry that you have to be going through this, but the only thing you can do now is be positive that he will make it through fine.  Wonderful writing.
Acies
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6 posted 2000-10-07 07:25 PM


I really dont have much to say but very touching piece.  

"we only wait
await what will come
await the future
await more pain"

Doesn't it seem like life is actually about this?


I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


curlygurly
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since 2000-09-12
Posts 276
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7 posted 2000-10-08 05:32 PM


Thanks for replyin guys, it means A LOT to me!!!  
Curlz


"i've kissed the moon a million times, danced with the angels in the sky"
enrique iglesias


kutzly
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since 2000-10-08
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ohio
8 posted 2000-10-08 06:20 PM


i love the poem
you have a great style of writing
remember your poems are you!
peace
me

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