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branden726
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0 posted 2000-10-07 12:57 PM


Stop right there,
Where are you going with my heart?
Yeah I thought it would end like this someday,
All we had would all just some how fade away,
In the end it will be okay,
Just Stop!
Dont walk out the door with my heart,
There are plenty other people who would die to get a piece of that,
You see im not mad at you,
For walking out on me now.

I still am madly in love with you but all good things come to an end,
We can still be friends but all you have to do is STOP!
Dont walk out with my heart dont leave me in the gutter,
Your the one who picked me out of the gutter in the first place,
Dont cause me all that pain again,
Please if you have a heart you will in the end...STOP!


"what doesnt kill you only makes you stronger"

© Copyright 2000 Branden Jacobs - All Rights Reserved
curlygurly
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since 2000-09-12
Posts 276
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1 posted 2000-10-07 03:17 PM


WOW this was excellent! you are very good at expressing how you feel through your writing! Can't wait to read more!  
Curlz


"i've kissed the moon a million times, danced with the angels in the sky"
enrique iglesias


StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31
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Colorado
2 posted 2000-10-07 03:20 PM


The message you wished to convey with your words came across perfectly clear. Thank you for sharing. I much enjoyed this piece. ~*~Jessica~*~

~*~Being an angel doesn't mean having a halo, it means doing the right thing and wanting to make a difference...~*~



Lakewalker
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3 posted 2000-10-07 05:40 PM


I like this a lot, the use of the word stop added a sense of drama to this, nice writing!
kutzly
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since 2000-10-08
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ohio
4 posted 2000-10-08 06:37 PM


i loved that you could understand everthing perfectly and i could tell what you were thinking and what that poem was meaning!
peace
me

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