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(Passion) Explosion
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(Passion) Explosion |
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!!! Member
since 2000-08-12
Posts 137VA (U.S.A) |
Engaging in 'that act',once again, that leaves my head buzzin' In which my passion is expressed by the dozen. In case tonight, in the clash, the words should be dandy I got my protection, in the form of my copywright handy. Actions, and words i dont dare utter in public As i use the big, shiny, black pen to post my rhetoric. In, and out of that deep tunnel of writer's block, and thought, On that enigmatic rollercoaster for which an answer is sought. Deepest thoughts, burning passions, uncontrollable feelings that dont cease As they clamor in my brain, lookin to be released. Experience that burning feeling when that time is near The pounding on the keyboard in the quiet basement for all to hear. When its all done, it leaves a wonderful impression Once i've burst forth with my creative expression! -!!!  < !signature--> -"..." [This message has been edited by !!! (edited 10-06-2000).] |
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chic Member
since 2000-01-26
Posts 245yellville, Ar, U.S. |
Ummm...a title...How about Poetic Burst or Creative Moment? I'm not very good with titles myself, but these seem like likely candidates. Good luck and Great poem  chic "Life is a game and we have to play, but in the end...we all die."-by me! |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
I enjoyed reading this piece. It let the mind wander slightly before bringing us to the ultimate conclusion. Well done. Now title suggestions....how about "Passions Spent" or maybe "Creative Explosion". I am not terribly happy with either of those suggestions but you get where I am going with the idea.  When you are old and grey and full of sleep, And nodding by the fire, take down this book, And slowly read, and dream of the soft look Your eyes had once, and of their shodows deep; How many loved your moments of glad grace, And loved your beauty with love false or true, But one man loved the pilgrim soul in you, And loved the sorrows of your changing face... William Butler Yeats |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I liked this one, it's very creative, and even about being creative! I'm horrible with titles myself, so I won't even try to help you there |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey this was great. How bout Burning Words of Fire of Passion or something...I dunno...loved it, keep up the kickin work. ~Carly Better days are on the way, my friend, just a ways on down the line. I believe that just around the bend, everythings gonna be fine... |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Very well written poem. For some reason, it kindda struck me as a good rap song. Maybe it's just me. I guess it is me. But still, i love your style, it's amazing how some poeple just have the talent with words. As, for the title, i agree with Lakewalker, i can't help you there either. I think you should decide what it should be for it's your emotions that made the poem. I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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!!! Member
since 2000-08-12
Posts 137VA (U.S.A) |
First off, id like to thank you all for takin time out to read my peice. Secondly, i thank you for your input in suggesting a title for my work. After careful consideration, I have decided to call it [Passion] Explosion. Thank you all once again, for your ideas, and for reading. Later! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought the poem was great. Keep it up bud! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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curlygurly Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 276USA |
WOW... umm very good poem! i really liked it, it was very very entertaining. great poem! Curlz "i've kissed the moon a million times, danced with the angels in the sky" enrique iglesias |
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!!! Member
since 2000-08-12
Posts 137VA (U.S.A) |
Thank you both for reading my poem! I am glad that you enjoyed it, and responded to it! |
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