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Caz
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since 2000-09-13
Posts 133
ConcepciĆ³n, Chile

0 posted 2000-10-05 08:29 PM


Do you remember two poems I wrote for a friend? Well, she wrote me a poem back. I'm in love, and I thought I had to share this with you 'cause you helped me a lot. Thanks.


To be with you

I do believe that God above,
created you for me to love.

He picked you out from all the rest,
'cause he knew I'd love you best.

My heart was once so brave and true,
but now it's gone from me to you.

If I go to heaven and your not there,
I'll write your name upon a golden stair.

If your not there by Judgment Day,
I'd know you went the other way.

I'd give the angels back my wings,
golden harp and other things.

Just to prove my love is true,
I'd go down stairs to be with you.

by Heather


It's been raining since you left me.

© Copyright 2000 Caz - All Rights Reserved
Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
1 posted 2000-10-05 10:05 PM


Tell your friend this was an amazing piece...Very beautiful...

~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~

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Twilight Zone
2 posted 2000-10-06 09:54 AM


Well, I'm happy for ya Heather.  This poem is really sweet at the same time has strong words in t.  You did a great job with this.  I could see how happy you are when you wrote this, and how much this person really means to you. keep writing

"If your not there by Judgment Day,
I'd know you went the other way.

I'd give the angels back my wings,
golden harp and other things.

Just to prove my love is true,
I'd go down stairs to be with you."

How I wish someone would say something this sweet to me  



I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
3 posted 2000-10-06 04:12 PM


I liked this, it's very creative thoughts.  Well written, I like it
Lovely_Kris
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 176

4 posted 2000-10-06 04:54 PM


wow i think this is good and i really really enjoyed reading it. hope to read more.
lovely_Kris

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