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tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

0 posted 2000-10-05 07:16 PM



Last night you came over,
To keep me from feeling sad.
You've seen me go through so much,
it must be hard for you to handle,
I cant help but feel bad.
As we sat outside,
The cool nights air hit my cheeks.
We watched the lightning light up the sky,
With every single vibrant streak.
You held me in your arms,
Reassuring me in every way,
That tomorrow will be better,
It will bring a brighter day.
You told me that you need me,
I felt for the first time in a while kind of loved.
That moment i needed to last forever,
I didnt want to be let out of your securing hug.
I'm so scared at what i've become,
Just the thought of tomorrow makes my soul numb.
I wish i could stay in your arms,
Never let me go.

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1 posted 2000-10-06 10:16 AM


This is really good, wow, he must really be a special person.  I like your style, it's different.

"We watched the lightning light up the sky,
With every single vibrant streak.
You held me in your arms,
Reassuring me in every way,
That tomorrow will be better,
It will bring a brighter day."

I love this part so much.  keep writing  


I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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2 posted 2000-10-06 07:13 PM


This is written so well.  I love the emotion you poured into this one.
Caz
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3 posted 2000-10-06 09:02 PM


Why is everybody writting about my life? lol
This poem is so great, the story behind it makes me feel so good, it makes me remember a good friend I have, a good friend I miss. It's good to have someone like that, that's at your side when you need a friend. Good luck, tomorrow will be better, it will bring a brighter day. Bye.


It's been raining since you left me.

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4 posted 2000-10-06 09:25 PM



  Great job on this!! It's not every day someone comes along that will never let us go...once again, terrific job.

   ~carly

Better days are on the way, my friend, just a ways on down the line.
I believe that just around the bend, everythings gonna be fine...

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5 posted 2000-10-06 09:33 PM


aww that was so good. I love when I'm held.. well bye CPAD!    


You can't find me for love, nor can you have me for love, you can love me for who I am.

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