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I Repent
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I Repent |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico 
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I Repent: Notice my dear that I still love you. Even though you've shaded me With an everlasting, unborn tree All of my tears still run true. Notice my sweet that I can't go on. My life withers away slow. I'n in love with you, you know? The nights kill my lonely dawn. Notice my love that I wish things were different. Why won't you come back? Your love is what I lack. I love you, and I repent.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Wow Dopey that was great! I love it!! I'm sorry you have to go through something like this...  Well keep smiling  Bel |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
You know what I dont understand???How do I still have feelings for someone after they broke my heart...The one guy that broke my heart I still care for him for some strange reason...I guess I never will get over him he was my first love...Thanks for sharing this piece Dopey...It was good!!! ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
you're full of love and heart-break in this chapter of your poetry...simply put this is just beautiful and i totally loved it. HUT TWO THREE FOUR! HUT TWO THREE FOUR! the clowns on parade the clowns mascerade rip off your face rip off your brain the clowns on parade -me |
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TAP2 Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211Morris, Il USA |
Ah, the softer side. Girls, you gotta realize that even though we are stereotyped as the players, some of us are vulnerable too. Some of us do care, and fall in love too easily, only to get our hearts broken. We can be emotional too. Thomas Let not a word go unspoken, A thought go unheard, Let not one heart be broken Dream of a perfect world. -Th.A.P. |
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Dopey Dope
Moderator
Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Thanks guys. Anyway Anomaly, yea im full of heart break in this Cycle, but wait till you see the 6th Round. You'll be shocked. If you think THIS is bad just wait hahaha why do you think i have more than 120+ poems in the 6th round and an average of 45 poems in all the others? Ive tripled my rate of writing! WHY? Well cuz i have TOO much to say....mostly about....well, heart break. Oh and about TAP's comment. Yea i agree...we do have feelings and emotions as shown here in this poem. I think women know this, but i also think a lot of women under estimate the raw sentiment that a man could have. I'm not saying this about all women, just a few that i know. Anyway bye! I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Dopey- nice poem, I like it  And about yours and Tap2's comments- that's so true. |
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