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TrueLUV Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 158Connecticut, U.S.A. |
It was meant to be a night of fun and unforgettable memories Instead it was a night of innocence lost unwillingly It was it was supposed to be the party of the year, but it became the party which brought much pain. As she cried in silence she felt her innocence being torn away. This act of violence still haunts her 'till this day. As she got free the look on her face was as if a part of her had died, her tears of anguish slowly rolled down her face. A part of her had died and she will never forget the pain. I tried to hold her and comfort her the best I knew how, but she pushed me away still with so much doubt. She then explained to me how much pain she experienced. She felt asthough an animal was on top of her taking advantage of a defenseless soul, tearing and ripping through her innocence. She still to this day hears the heavy breathing of that animal, as if he still is out on the loose tracking her like a predator does to the prey. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
ahh how sad and horrible. shows how acts of violence can be forever sketched into the victim's heart and mind. i like how you didn't say exactly what happened, but instead described it so we'd know. very touching ~!*DQ*!~ "One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be" ~Carol King |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Damn.......this poem leaves me speechless. This is just about one of the things i despise most in this sick world. I HATE people who take advantage of people sexually and physically. Down with that! We must protect each other at all costs....great poem.....  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Whoa that poem touches on a serious subject with such expression. I felt for the girl with every line i read. It really brought the unfortunate agony of it all to life. |
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Caz Member
since 2000-09-13
Posts 133Concepción, Chile |
woooow, I'm really speechless. This poem is so crude, it talks by it self. You can follow the action even though you don't want to see what's happening to her. Really really good poem, and I'm sorry for this girl if it's true. I felt this one deep in my hearth, from my estomach to my hearth. Excellent poem, we should all learn from this one especially, it's a lesson of life. This can happen to anyone. Bye. It's been raining since you left me. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Some guys just dont care...I mean if a guy could do this to a girl and not have any shame...I dont know what to say...I dont know what I would do if anything happened to me unwillingly...I know what I would do...The guy would no longer be able to do things with girls that he wants...Haha You know what I mean...Now dont make me get into detail...Just make sure that you are their for this girl...It seems like she really needs you... ~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
This is powerful writing about such a horrible problem. The lines just make you hate the people who do this more and more. Great poem, awful situatuion. |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
What a wonderful poem! So sorry for the pain that was caused by this horrible thing. I wish there was something I could do for whomever this is about. I know how hard such a situation can be, I really enjoyed how you were able to convey the message with out the words telling us.  Congratulations!! Keep it up!Love Always ~*~Jessica~*~ ~*~Everyone hears what you say. Friends listen to what you say. Best friends listen to what you don't say.~*~ |
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