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Jeremy Halstead
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since 2000-06-01
Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

0 posted 2000-10-03 05:01 AM




Here I Am

There she is...again.
Noscelantly, unaware...
stabbing me...again.

There she is...of course.
Engaged, expecting...
not with me...of course.

As she sits...right there...
beautifully, musically
playing my heart...from right there.

I've had no dillusions
of ever being free.
I know that once in awhile
she'll be this close to me.

She holds these dillusions
that the wound has healed...no scar.
Here I am...again,
bleeding from afar.

Jeremy D. Halstead  10~3~00

© Copyright 2000 Jeremy D. Halstead - All Rights Reserved
Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
1 posted 2000-10-03 07:21 AM


"As she sits...right there...
beautifully, musically
playing my heart...from right there."

"She holds these dillusions
that the wound has healed...no scar.
Here I am...again,
bleeding from afar."

Standing, clapping ... with much applause Jeremy! Truly a wonderful piece of writing here. Great imagery you used to capture such raw emotions. Excellent!  

Best wishes,
/Kit

Acies
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Member Rara Avis
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Posts 7665
Twilight Zone
2 posted 2000-10-03 10:23 AM


It's either I haven't been paying attention, or is it that I haven't seen you around in a while?  Well, it's nice to read your work again.  As expected, based on your talent, it's a wonderful piece again.  

"I've had no dillusions
of ever being free.
I know that once in awhile
she'll be this close to me."

BRAVO!!!



I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
3 posted 2000-10-03 10:49 AM


Jeremy~It is wonderful to see you still posting...And posting such beautiful work!!!Thanks for sharing this piece with us...Keep it up my friend!!!

~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~

StarPryncess17
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since 2000-05-31
Posts 932
Colorado
4 posted 2000-10-03 12:11 PM


As Always a beautiful post Jer! I thought that this one was absolutely magnificent. You are so talented and I am green with envy...ok not that envious. Anyways, I think that there are some things that you are not telling me? what is going on here...? I think you need to call me. Oh, and hey what was up with you calling me that one morning at 5 letting it ring once and then hanging up? I was a little confused. But don't worry I'm not angry   hehehe Nice poem dewd! You are the best.
Luv2LuvYa
Love always
~*~Jess Girl~*~


~*~sMiLe! It MaKeS yOuR bUtT ShInE~*~

DancinQueen
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA
5 posted 2000-10-03 12:58 PM


Hey babe   OH how i love your poems as always. You have a true talent, one that sometimes I wish I had. And thanks so much for lending an ear the other night it meant alot. and as i write this im praying that i have the right Jeremy lol im pretty sure I do, but if i dont excuse all that up there   Im sorry. well neways keep writing cause i love your work.

love always ~!*DQ*!~


"One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be"
~Carol King

Jacman
Member
since 2000-06-27
Posts 291
Dwight Il, US
6 posted 2000-10-03 04:39 PM


Well Jeremy, I know exactly who you are speaking of in this piece.  And I know that as hard and just so wrong as it may seem, you've got to get over this.  Your kind of like in a racoon trap(if you don't know I'll explain later.)  Just let go before you start knawing your arm off.  I'm here for ya man even though I have no time between two jobs now, I will make time for my brothers.  I luv ya man, keep up the good fight and you will conquer the day.  later!!

jason

I'm not concieted...I'm convinced.

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
7 posted 2000-10-04 02:25 PM


This poem has a power behind it, your words are amazing.  I second everyone else in declare your great talent.  Awesome poem
Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico
8 posted 2000-10-04 03:39 PM


I liked this poem tons. You DO have talent, I admire your work. Keep posting up bud.




I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


TAP2
Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211
Morris, Il USA
9 posted 2000-10-05 10:37 AM


Once again I feel like a no-talent hack. Your phrsiology and word usage is simply breath-taking. The picture you painted with your words is amazingly heartbreaking. Keep up the good work.

Thomas

TAP2
Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 211
Morris, Il USA
10 posted 2000-10-05 10:37 AM


Once again I feel like a no-talent hack. Your phrsiology and word usage is simply breath-taking. The picture you painted with your words is amazingly heartbreaking. Keep up the good work.

Thomas

Let not a word go unspoken,
A thought go unheard,
Let not one heart be broken
Dream of a perfect world.

-Th.A.P.

Isabel Galaxia
Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733

11 posted 2000-10-05 05:37 PM


Grrr, you make me jealous!  You're way too talented.  Wow it's been a while since I've talked to you..okay so we never really talked...but replied...oh, you get the idea.  I'm you're going through this   but keep smiling alright  . Oh yeah, keep up this writing okay??  
Bel


Beautiful is empty
Beautiful is free
Beautiful loves no one
Beautiful stripped me
-"Beautiful" CREED

Fearless_Angel
Member
since 2000-10-03
Posts 57
Calgary, AB Canada
12 posted 2000-10-05 09:12 PM


Hey Jer:
    Wow! This poem really captured me. It's magnificent! You really have lots of talent. I feel pretty much the same way about someone and I totally understand your poem. It was very beautiful!  Keep it up, okies? Peace!
                     Lotsa Love,
                               Angel

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