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DancinQueen
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0 posted 2000-10-02 11:29 PM


*I'll Be With You Again..*

My heart aches for your touch,
the missing piece of my heart needs you so much.
I'm trying so hard to stay tough, never letting a tear seep,
But with tears burning my cheeks,I crumble to the floor in a heap.
This feeling deep inside won't go away,
I sacrificed my heart and soul, and this is the price to pay.
You completed a part of me I never knew was there,
now you're gone and I wish that for just once life would be fair.
Just because you made it to heaven before me,
doesn't mean that I can't see you in my dreams.
I'll be with you again someday,
and you can bet that "I love you" is the first thing i'll say.*




"One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be"
~Carol King

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shadydaze
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1 posted 2000-10-02 11:49 PM


GOOD WORK ON THIS HEARTFELT POEM.

Erin
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2 posted 2000-10-03 12:09 PM


DQ~
Girl this is so sad...I hope that one day you are able to say those words to this person...Wow you poured your heart out didnt you???Its good to see you back!!!


~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~

DancinQueen
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3 posted 2000-10-03 12:57 PM


ERIN~~> hey girley we need to talk like we used to. i know ive been gone, ive just been hurting so bad lately and im trying to get everything out on paper but sometime's thats just not enough ya know? i'll keep in touch i promise, L8er babe*

~!*DQ*!~


"One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be"
~Carol King

Jeremy Halstead
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4 posted 2000-10-03 01:22 AM


Excellent....simply excellent.  What a catchy and emotional way to say that kind of message...I'm impressed.

Jeremy

Curse not upon love, for it is the greatest of great things. Be it not love that curses you....but thy lack thereof. -J.D.H.


DancinQueen
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5 posted 2000-10-03 12:47 PM


Thanks so much J   Your replys always mean so much to me

~!*DQ*!~
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"One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be"
~Carol King


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6 posted 2000-10-03 05:06 PM


Hey Kiley  
This is the reason why I've asked you to post again.  The talent is on you.  Very well expressed emotions in this poem.  Sorry to hear what's going on with you.  If there's something I can do, just say it.    keep smiling, keep writing

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


DancinQueen
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7 posted 2000-10-03 05:56 PM


Hey Acire   Thanks for always bein there and replying. It means the world to me!!

~!*Kiley*!~


"One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be"
~Carol King

Lakewalker
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8 posted 2000-10-04 02:53 PM


Your poems are awesome, I love the feelings behind them.  Great emotion in this one, I like it

"My heart aches for your touch,
the missing piece of my heart needs you so much."



DancinQueen
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9 posted 2000-10-04 04:47 PM


Lakewalker~~   thanks for replying, writing is how i get my emotions out, so thats probably why there's always alot of emotion behind my poems, thanks again!

~!*DQ*!~


"One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be"
~Carol King

Pixie-Babe03
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10 posted 2000-10-04 06:03 PM


This is SO GOOD!  keep it up    i can tell you were writing from your heart
~*Pixie*~

DancinQueen
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11 posted 2000-10-04 11:17 PM


Pixie~> yes i am, all my poems come from the heart  

~!*DQ*!~


"One fine day you'll look at me and know that love was meant to be"
~Carol King

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