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Pixie-Babe03
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0 posted 2000-10-02 07:35 PM



She doesn't even know you,
not the way I do.
She was never the one to listen
when you were sad and blue.

Who did come to
when you needed to be set free?
You shouldn't need to think too hard,
don;t you realize it was ME!

Or did you forget,
the number you would call
when you needed to be cheered up-
I listened to it ALL!

I gave you this shoulder of mine,
when you needed to cry.
And when your friends forgot you
I listened and looked you in the eye.

Can't you see?
I am the one that will care?
If you go to her,
the feelings and support just won't be there.

© Copyright 2000 Justine - All Rights Reserved
~*Meghan*~
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since 2000-05-22
Posts 17

1 posted 2000-10-02 07:58 PM


Hey! I absolutely loved this poem. It was so direct and to the point. I can't wait for more posts from you! ths poem expresses my life. Thanks for sharing,
LOVE
~*Meghan*~

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2 posted 2000-10-02 08:17 PM


I liked this poem a lot, it seems like you always write about some guy who has left you for another in some sense or another, That licks. nice poem tho.




I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


Deranger
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since 2000-05-10
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Somewhere, between here and there
3 posted 2000-10-02 08:21 PM


Really liked the rhyming scheme...

Anyone else find it strange to live others lives through their words?


Spreading insanity, one post at a time

"Way back in eighty-seven, where we bust rockstands till we get to heaven"



branden726
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4 posted 2000-10-02 10:04 PM


Stop writing about this fool! You dont need him you need a guy who cares for you and doesnt have to make a descision between 2 girls he should be able to see both of you and choose right then and there the truth his your both gonna get played...ya its true he doesnt love either of  you its all a male game trust me ive played...now its the worst thing i could have ever done and regret it all but trust me he doesnt deserve you!!!!!!!!!!

"what doesnt kill you only makes you stronger"

LyricFetish
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since 2000-01-13
Posts 528
North Carolina
5 posted 2000-10-02 10:50 PM


Girl, I completely understand you. Boys are bad! (well, not really, but it makes things less complicated to think that way) Really awesome poem, I liked the rhyming as well, keep on writing! Peace out.  

*~Meredith~*

I'll just keep on laughing,
Hiding the tears in my eyes...
*Oleander

Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
6 posted 2000-10-03 12:20 PM


I think I understand this one all to well...I have dealt with a guy choosing a girl over me...He was like a best friend to me then more like a boyfriend...But he chose to kiss another girl one little kiss...And that was it we lost everything we had...I dont know why you are waiting for this guy to choose between you two...Its not worth it...He'll do it again if he knows you will wait around for him...But anyways thats only my opinion...Thanks for sharing this...

~*Love is sometimes like a rose. Beautiful in the beginning but dies in the end.*~

Pixie-Babe03
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since 2000-08-29
Posts 387
Central Maine
7 posted 2000-10-03 08:22 AM


Hey y'all thanks so much for all your awesome replies.. i wrote all the one about this guy in one night so i'm not still hung up on it... i just wanted to post them all... i only have a couple more... so thanks again! buh~bye
~*Pixie*~

Lakewalker
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Posts 3289
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8 posted 2000-10-04 02:11 PM


I liked how this calls out to him (and the reader), trying to get his (and our) atention.  Uh...maybe I just confused some people, but anyway, I like the poem!
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9 posted 2000-10-05 09:37 AM


Omg this poem is so true! This is exactly how i feel with my best friend. I couldnt have put it in better words. Good job!
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