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Suga_Baby
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since 2000-08-06
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Maine, USA

0 posted 2000-10-02 03:50 PM


A summer of memories,
made and created.
You were gone in an instant,
left me lonely and jaded.

I was nothing to you,
you meant so much to me.
I’ve been slapped across the face,
by a harsh reality.

Now I don’t even exist,
it’s like you’d rather forget,
all our times together,
and even the day we met.

I tried my hardest,
I was so good to you.
I was there for you, cared for you--
What more could I do?

But it’s more than over now,
we aren’t even friends.
I’d like to be,
but I guess the end was the end.

We hardly talk now,
and when we do, you’re so rude.
Hopefully we can  be friends,
when you stop being such a fool!

© Copyright 2000 Sara - All Rights Reserved
Acies
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Posts 7665
Twilight Zone
1 posted 2000-10-02 04:01 PM


You have expressed your feelings real well in this poem.  Sorry to hear the circumstances that brought this poem about.. keep your head up and keep writing

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


sweetstuff101
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since 2000-07-27
Posts 375
OK, USA
2 posted 2000-10-02 07:15 PM


that was excellent! It reminds me of my own experiences this summer. You express yourself well, great job, keep wrting!!

Luv, ~*~SweetStuff~*~


~*~y0u CaN tRy 2 ErAsE s0mEoNe Fr0m YoUr LiFe, BuT iF tHeY rEaLLy MeAnT s0mEtHiNg 2 y0u, YoU WiLl NeVeR 4gEt ThEm.~*~



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3 posted 2000-10-02 07:25 PM


I liked this poem a lot like always. Keep it up!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


Deranger
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since 2000-05-10
Posts 498
Somewhere, between here and there
4 posted 2000-10-02 07:31 PM


"Somethings wern't meant to be..."

That's a bunch of garbage, if you ask me...But try as i might, i cannot make any kind of sensible arguement against it.  I hope he comes to his senses...good luck, good poem, and good bye...


Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
5 posted 2000-10-02 09:27 PM


Wow I am speechless...You just opened yourself up and told it like it is...Good job!!!Keep it up!!!

It TaKeS a MiNuTe To LiKe SoMeOnE, aN hOuR tO hAvE a CrUsH oN sOmEoNe & A dAy To FaLl In LoVe, BuT iT tAkEs A lIfEtImE tO fOrGeT sOmEoNe.

Caz
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since 2000-09-13
Posts 133
Concepción, Chile
6 posted 2000-10-03 09:25 PM


Is this poem about me? or is it that every summer this happens. I can totally feel what you write, I was once in that situation, it took me a lot of time, a lot of hard work to get my life back. I know what it feels, I know it's hard, but you have to get up, and keep going. My email is avaiable, and my ICQ number is there for you, if you need any help, you can find a friend here for you, I'll help you as much as I can, I know how you feel. Bye, and I'm at your side.

It's been raining since you left me.

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