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Deranger
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Somewhere, between here and there

0 posted 2000-10-01 08:05 PM



Better Someday

The wind caresses her face,
As she stares into the, vacant air,
Memories, of fingers passed,
Lovingly through her hair,
Washes her mind, feeling her so divine,
But he is no where…to be found,
It’s all in her, broken-up head.

Up in the skies, she hears a terrible sound,
Menacing clouds, herald the storms inbound,
Misery fills her, yeah she starts to drown,

But she always says:
Life was gonna get better someday,
Gonna be better someway”

And always buzzing around…her head,
All the recountings of those things, so sweetly said,
Filters through her sullen sighs,
But these days,
It’s hard to look her, straight in the eye,

She always looks at the skies,
Wonders why everything had to be like this,
Why she ever said goodbye, without a kiss,
Days and memories she’s,
She’s sure to miss,

And she always says:
Life was gonna get better someday,
Gonna be better someway”
Oh god, please let it be better someday.”

She strolls across the town, with no particular place to go,
In her heart she still knows, whenever the winds blows,
Wherever he goes, she knows,
It’ll never be the same,

Longingly awaited, for someone who just can’t be so,
Easily imitated, her consequences slated,
For a life that just can’t be so calmly abated,
In this life she knows, she can’t ever make it,
  
So she starts to cry and says:
Life was gonna get better someday,
Gonna be better someway”
Oh god, please let it be better someday.”

And I always said:
“Everything was just inside my, broken-up head,
Laying among our shattered, long lost dreams,
Man tell me this life, is much more than it seems,
Cause I think I’m falling, apart at the seams.”


Spreading insanity, one post at a time

"Way back in eighty-seven, where we bust rockstands till we get to heaven"



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Child of the Stars
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1 posted 2000-10-01 08:12 PM



  Awesome. And where have YOU been?? hehe... this was sooo beautiful. Kudos to you.

   ~Carly

Better days are on the way, my friend, just a ways on down the line.
I believe that just around the bend, everythings gonna be fine...

HerMelness
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since 2000-07-12
Posts 37
Bridgewater, NS, Canada
2 posted 2000-10-01 08:13 PM


I like this alot.. it seems so perfect.. I think it'd make a nice song.. =)
Keep it up!


-Wherever you go, go with all your heart.-

AngelShell
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since 2000-03-01
Posts 446
not heaven nor hell so...
3 posted 2000-10-01 08:15 PM


Hey,

You did post it after all...I had a feeling you would...
Well...it's great poem in so many ways...
You know I love it...

I hope that things do get better someday...don't we all hope they'll get better *sighs thinking that one day things might be just like we always imagined as kids*
You know...life is like a chocolate covered ice cream *imitates forrest gump*...anyway...your childhood is like the chocolate...yummy...always good...the rest of your life from teens to old age is the ice cream...cold...sometimes worth it...gives you brain freeze...and then death is like the stick...there for no reason other than to keep the rest of the ice cream there...

Hmm...I wonder if I could make a poem out of that....

**I didn't loose my mind it was mine to give away**
~Robbie Williams~

Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
4 posted 2000-10-01 08:22 PM


Deranger~~~This was amazing...Where did you come up with this???Beautiful job...2 thumbs up for you!!!

It TaKeS a MiNuTe To LiKe SoMeOnE, aN hOuR tO hAvE a CrUsH oN sOmEoNe & A dAy To FaLl In LoVe, BuT iT tAkEs A lIfEtImE tO fOrGeT sOmEoNe.

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
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On the streets w/ people
5 posted 2000-10-01 10:58 PM


Wow, this got me thinking.  Wonderful job writing this one, it's really really really really  good.  Sorry, I just had to emphasize that   
anomaly187
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 284
San Francisco,CA,US
6 posted 2000-10-02 12:10 PM


damn!!...this is amazing!!!...i can't think of anything else to say i'm speachless on this one...totally blew me away

HUT TWO THREE FOUR!
HUT TWO THREE FOUR!
the clowns on parade
the clowns mascerade
rip off your face
rip off your brain
the clowns on parade
-me

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7 posted 2000-10-02 07:33 PM


Great poem, i really liked the way it was written!!!! I liked the topic and i thought it was just DOPE!



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


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