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Ceinwyn
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since 2000-07-09
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0 posted 2000-10-01 07:54 PM


Conceited is your soul
Always thinking that I would be nothing without you
But let me tell you something
It was me before you
There really wasn't anything special that you did
Nothing, nobody hasn't done before
So go on close that door
And take your ego as you go
And your so called knowledge of me
You don't know me nor will you ever
Nor will you ever taste the sweet flavor of my words any longer
Without you, my soul will continue to grow stronger
That much I am sure of
Because I know deep down within my heart
That I am better off without your tainted love..


"Let me be the one you call, if you jump I'll break your fall, lift you up and fly away with you into the night"

~Crash and Burn~

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Deranger
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since 2000-05-10
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Somewhere, between here and there
1 posted 2000-10-01 08:01 PM


"Sometimes i feel, i got to runaway, i got to get away from the pain you drive into long to me, and i;ve lost my light, for i toss and turn i don't sleep at night, once i ran to you, now i run from you..."

Long live the eighties!
What do you mean there over?

Hehe, nice work...sorry about the tangent, the title just made something go off in my head...

"Always thinking that I would be nothing without you"

That's a powerful feeling, make sure it doesn't get the best of you...uh...my aching head...ah...


Deranger
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Somewhere, between here and there
2 posted 2000-10-01 08:01 PM


"Sometimes i feel, i got to runaway, i got to get away from the pain you drive into long to me, and i;ve lost my light, for i toss and turn i don't sleep at night, once i ran to you, now i run from you..."

Long live the eighties!
What do you mean there over?

Hehe, nice work...sorry about the tangent, the title just made something go off in my head...

"Always thinking that I would be nothing without you"

That's a powerful feeling, make sure it doesn't get the best of you...uh...my aching head...ah...



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"Way back in eighty-seven, where we bust rockstands till we get to heaven"



HerMelness
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since 2000-07-12
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Bridgewater, NS, Canada
3 posted 2000-10-01 08:07 PM


Very nice poem.. Anger fuels the best poetry, I think. Hopefully it helped with the feelings. =) Keep up the good work!


-Wherever you go, go with all your heart.-

AngelShell
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since 2000-03-01
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not heaven nor hell so...
4 posted 2000-10-01 08:31 PM


I like it I like it alot.
Some of those feelings have been running through my mind lately...I just couldn't pin them down long enough to write about them...something else some one beat me to...but...I'm glad it was you because you did it so wonderfully...

Remember, you are who you are no matter who you are with...never forget that...

**life is like an ice cream...the trick is not to get brain freeze**

**I didn't loose my mind it was mine to give away**
~Robbie Williams~

Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
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On the streets w/ people
5 posted 2000-10-01 11:01 PM


I sensed sort of an attitude behind this, I like that a lot.  Your words are great here, nice writing!
shadydaze
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6 posted 2000-10-02 02:57 PM


i too sense the attitude behind the poem. it was an inspiring attitude no doubt. this poem was great, i enjoyed reading it. dont forget to check out my work. your input is valuable.
LoveBug
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7 posted 2000-10-02 03:31 PM


I'm SO glad that you saw this person for who he really is, and that you aren't clinging to this "tainted love". Great work!!!

(you go, girl!)



False gems may shine as brightly as the genuine article, but there are always those who can tell the difference.



Acies
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8 posted 2000-10-02 03:42 PM


I see a lot of anger and strength in thes poem.  Once in a while it's nice to see someone as strong willed as you for we may be able to follow your steps.  Great work!!!  keep ya head up

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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