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Exploration of Exstinction
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Exploration of Exstinction |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
The decay of a nation within your mind watch as the blue turns to black Decadence was always around the corner i'm sick from loving all this gas Watch a tear turn into blood i watch myself descend into nothingess Staring outside from within this vessel is starting to grow faint I dreamt the dream i fell away losing to reality with a smile My world is at last cracking open the blood is spilling out like a river This is the exploration of exstinction your love is nothing but imagination I'm drowning in a pool of liquer black-blooded eroded motor *this is not as good as i would of liked to have written it but i did it in 5 minutes before i went to sleep...so maybe i'll redo do it in the future possibly* HUT TWO THREE FOUR! HUT TWO THREE FOUR! the clowns on parade the clowns mascerade rip off your face rip off your brain the clowns on parade -me |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
if you wrote this poem for only 5 minutes, I can't wait to read the poems that you write in more than 5 minutes. This is an exceptional write anomaly187. I am giving you a standing ovation. I love your style in describing events. keep it up  I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
*dances a jig* "the blood is spilling out like a river" Yummy and scrumpious (sp?) powerful too..and you and you...woohoo! Spreading insanity, one post at a time "Way back in eighty-seven, where we bust rockstands till we get to heaven" |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
wow...I've read a lot of poems today, but this one may be my favourite...and poems written in 5 minutes can be very effective because they're just raw emotion...you don't have time to sit there and perfect every last detail... **life is like an ice cream...the trick is not to get brain freeze** **I didn't loose my mind it was mine to give away** ~Robbie Williams~ |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Wow, this is thought provoking stuff you're writing. I love it. |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very good. I wouldnt re-do it but thats only because i just wing it when i write. I never re-do anything unless its a spelling error. Thats about it anomaly..... i dont know.....im just a one timer poet. I do it....if it sucks....OH WELL! hahaha i couldn't care less. but this was great! adios!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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