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Dopey Dope
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0 posted 2000-10-01 01:11 PM


New Days, New Ways:


I dot my I's and I cross my T's.
I'm trying to escape society.
I run away from my heart break past.
I put on my old, worned out mask.

The lights turned grey about 2 years ago.
My life went fast, but then again to slow.
I'm moving on alone and oftly scared.
In the past, that's when I cared.

I saw those eyes so open and warm,
But that smiles gone, and now I mourn.
It's all a part of the healing way.
So I'll live on and begin a new day.





I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


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Isabel Galaxia
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1 posted 2000-10-01 01:14 PM


Like I've told you before, you have a lot of talent my friend.  I'm not quite sure I understand this as much as I should...probably becuase I never talk to you and don't really know much about you.  But really, your poem is great.  I'm guessing somebody hurt you...but I might be wrong......so keep it up, hasta luego
Bel


Beautiful is empty
Beautiful is free
Beautiful loves no one
Beautiful stripped me
-"Beautiful" CREED

Lakewalker
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2 posted 2000-10-01 02:07 PM


This is great writing Dopey, you're really good at writing. Great poem
Suga_Baby
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3 posted 2000-10-01 03:55 PM


Oooooh prettttttyyyyyyyy! You rock my little shattered world Dopey_Dope! Keep it up! WOO!
Jenn Cirrincione
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4 posted 2000-10-01 06:24 PM


Yeah... It's a great poem... and yeah I don't understand it as much as I probably should. You have a gift though... for what I can't always understand, I know there's something special in it!
Jenn

"He's mastered the art, of looking sincere, his eyes have a way, of making you stay, don't look in the mirror"- Chely Wright

sweetstuff101
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5 posted 2000-10-01 06:58 PM


that was excellent! I really liked that. Great job, keep writing!

  ~*~SweetStuff~*~


~*~y0u CaN tRy 2 ErAsE s0mEoNe Fr0m YoUr LiFe, BuT iF tHeY rEaLLy MeAnT s0mEtHiNg 2 y0u, YoU WiLl NeVeR 4gEt ThEm.~*~



LoveBug
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6 posted 2000-10-01 07:15 PM


Dopey, this is a great piece. I especally like the last stanza:

"I saw those eyes so open and warm,
But that smiles gone, and now I mourn.
It's all a part of the healing way.
So I'll live on and begin a new day."

I know it's hard to move on, but I'm glad you see that it must be done. Keep up the great work!  



False gems may shine as brightly as the genuine article, but there are always those who can tell the difference.



Deranger
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7 posted 2000-10-01 07:20 PM


"I have felt the healing fingertips, burn like fire, this burning desire"

To escape society, try escaping sanity...hehe,

Hmmm, reading Isabel's reply, maybe we as authors should explain our muse?  

Spreading insanity, one post at a time

"Way back in eighty-seven, where we bust rockstands till we get to heaven"



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