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emptyness
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since 2000-03-09
Posts 95
mobile,Ala,USA

0 posted 2000-10-01 05:24 AM


there she lays
two feet from my side
yet forever out of my reach
in a seprate world

i dont know why i torment myself
i dont know why i even try
all i know is
i long for the untouchable

it takes all the energy i have
to keep from saying the truth
for the truth would set me free
but would destroy her life

so i will remain her faithful advisor
loyal friend and silent listner
yet all the time i live a lie
but the lie is the only truth she knows

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"scribere iussit amor" love commanded me to write    
"Cogito ergo sum"-I think, therefore I exist




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Isabel Galaxia
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since 2000-06-18
Posts 733

1 posted 2000-10-01 12:10 PM


Do you notice a trend here?  Okay...first off, it's great, like usual.  Like I've said before, whatever this is must really be hard for you(you're probably thinking "duh")..but I can't think of anything to tell you...............hasta luego
Bel

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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico
2 posted 2000-10-01 12:47 PM


This is great dude, I know exactly what you are going through!!! This is so amazing, you put the situation perfectly into words. PERFECTLY! Great job, much appreciated.



I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.


Lakewalker
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since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
3 posted 2000-10-01 01:50 PM


This is awesome, I love the flow and feeling in it, great work!
anomaly187
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 284
San Francisco,CA,US
4 posted 2000-10-01 02:00 PM


amazing poem man..i loved everything about it and can relate...ok

HUT TWO THREE FOUR!
HUT TWO THREE FOUR!
the clowns on parade
the clowns mascerade
rip off your face
rip off your brain
the clowns on parade
-me

UnPumpkin
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since 2001-03-25
Posts 18

5 posted 2001-03-25 01:20 AM


Jealous
Jealous
Very Jealous

Fading Away
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since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia
6 posted 2001-04-17 02:12 AM


*applauds*

Beautiful poem...
Simply beautiful.

--Marie

subconsciously, i think i can eat so much to make my stomach hurt, instead of my heart.

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